Reviews by Eminath

Whom Shall Reign? · Mon Feb 27, 2006 9:57 pm

While I understand that you're TRYING to be grammatically correct--using "whom" and all that in the title--to grammatically knowledgable perusers of the site, that glaring error is a huge put-off. And, truthfully, I didn't even read the drabble, just went straight to "add review." The title must be "who shall reign." one uses whom in relation with a preposition or prepositional phrase/clause, like, "to whom the letter is addressed" or "for whom the bell tolled", et cetera. read the title aloud to yourself. See? it sounds bizarre, doesn't it? same with these examples: "whom went there?"

as a relative pronoun, it's a tricky word, i understand. but reading aloud, "For whom the bell tolled" sounds distinguished, unlike "whom shall reign." the latter sounds "wrong" aloud--use your ears. use whom as the object of a verb or a preposition. stick to that, and you should be fine.

HOWEVER, whom is sometimes used (as in the case with "whomever") as a plural form of who (whoever). that's considered optional now in our grammatically lenient society, but an example:
CORRECT: "Whomever can join us." But, like I said, that's optional. Don't bother with it; just makes you sound stuck up and pedantic. Smile smiley face

bottom line: use whom as the object of a verb or preposition (al phrase/clause). Other times, just read the sentence aloud and see if it sounds weird. Unless you're not a native speaker, that'll usually serve you well (unless you think "I did good" sounds perfectly all right Smile smiley face

).

Anyway, I hope this was helpful. Any questions and feel free to contact me.

--K

By the Sea · Tue Nov 01, 2005 5:22 pm

I'm delighted that you found some inspiration to write after my review! *smiles* I know the feeling you describe (and am in the throes of it now with my own GIGANTIC fanlit that I'm working on...) and I also know that sometimes a good review does the job. THIS CHAPTER: I can't tell you how heartbreaking it is to see Eomer like this, and Lothiriel too--I wonder if Arwen, Aragorn, or Elrond/Elrond's sons can help? Has Bilbo & co. left yet? I really hope that Eomer recovers soon (it's just too sad!). I thought that Elfhelm's first sight of her (last chapter, I believe) was especially poignant; your description of her was perfect. Also perfect was your tactful, sweet way of the Elfhelm/Lothiriel interaction. So precious! I hope you continue to write and well done!

By the Sea · Mon Oct 24, 2005 7:36 pm

I came across this story yesterday in one of my many perusals of the site for more E/L stories and I can truthfully say that yours is probably one of the most creative, realistic, and well done stories of this genre that I've read. Every chapter had my heart leap into my throat; when I realized that there would soon be a very ugly confrontation between our favorite couple, I almost didn't want to read it, that's how powerfully this story has affected me. Many of us fangirls love to dream of true love between them and the theme that love can surpass all odds, and very rarely do we as readers (or writers!) find a story that gives such a refreshing and unique scenario as this one does. We don't like to think of the possibility of discord and discomfort in Meduseld and the fact that you aimed at this head on with no qualms is admirable and shows how fearless a writer you are. When I finished 'Ghosts of Meduseld' and looked to see when you had last updated, I have to be honest and admit that I was very disappointed. You have a gift for writing and a creative, refreshing outlook on our favorite couple and I'd hate to see this story join the pile of abandoned fanlit. This story has great potential and is a wonderful read already; I know that if you reapply yourself to it, you will be happy with your final product. I know your readers certainly will be! So, to sum up, your story is phenomenal and extremely creative and I really hope you find the motivation (this review? :O) to continue writing because I know that I would certainly appreciate it and I know a lot of others on this site would too. So, happy writing and wonderful job!

Don't Panic! · Fri Jan 14, 2005 10:36 pm

Well, truth be told, this fic is the reason I became a member of the site. I began reading the sequel (SEQUEL? WHERE?!) and when I discovered that I could keep tabs on it... Well, I simply had to get that! Anyway, although I am not new to JRRT by any means, I am new to the idea of QUALITY LotR fanfic, and I must say... Extremely impressed. I have read the odd "Stuck in ME" story, and have found it to be nauseating. That you did not hide from the Westron/English barrier (the much referred to sentence in the Appendices -- "you could say that English evolved from Westron..." paraphrased, of course..) is a testament to both your courage and your ability as a writer. Well done, you!

There are a few things that bothered me about the characterization of the elves, but once I thought of it, there really is not much to go on concerning every day life. So, in all respects, you did your research well (DON'T GET ME STARTED!) and I was pleased with your upfront, unafraid style to discuss.... shall we say... the finer things of womanhood. (Cough. A seriously unhumorous cough.) Anyway... Well done, again, and I look forward to the continuing saga!

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