Reviews by NeumeIndil

Night In Hollin · Sun Jul 17, 2005 10:09 am

As usual, Nancy, a great piece. I never would have thought of it. Each character is there in all of his facets and it paints a deep and more intimate picture of Boromir than we usually get. I also like that no specific dance partner is brought up from his past. After all, the man deserves to have some secrets. Smile smiley face

Legends · Thu Jul 07, 2005 11:28 pm

This has most likely said before but as I've only just finished it... wow. I love the dragon. I love the Hand Healer, especially her partial cat-like nature as there seem to be few cats in ME. Character voices were excellent and gave a good, easy to follow contrast. The incest-esque gave me a bit of an "ick" moment, but to each his/her own and it wasn't turned into a huge deal. Thank you for a great piece of Fanfic.

On An Elfling Discovering the "Difference" · Sat Jul 02, 2005 8:13 pm

How cute. That is one of the many reasons I hope I never raise children. At least his father handled it well. Great character choices and voices were good. I never thought about just how an elf figures such things out either so good job on originality. Smile smiley face

This Too Shall Pass.... · Sat Jul 02, 2005 8:02 am

Ok, I gotta give you props for that title, as much as I 1) Disliked that scene in the movie and 2) Dislike the idea of poor hobbits being eaten. A different take on what might have happened, but I'm glad the Fell Beast at least gets heartburn. Smile smiley face

Nicely done.

500 Leagues · Sun Jun 26, 2005 4:55 pm

Too funny! That's freakin' awesome. ROFL smiley face

Falling Stars · Fri Jun 24, 2005 11:08 pm

Aww! Snuggly, happy hobbits. The setting is great and the falling stars thing is always a recipe for romance. Good short-short.

A Yuletide Conversation · Tue Jun 14, 2005 8:36 pm

What a revealing slice of life for Legolas' background and family. I enjoyed it very much. I would like to offer a couple of suggestions from my experience as a college writing tutor and copy editor.

Overall, your clarity would improve if you looked at punctuation again. Commas are especially dangerous little buggers since their omission (i.e. the first set of quote brackets) or over abundance can change the entire meaning of a sentence. Your first sentence would also benefit from a re-reading; it confused me for a moment.

A great website I have found and used often is:
www.dianahacker.com/rulesforwriters

This is an online guidebook for almost every writing rule one can think of, including punctuation and grammar. Many of my students found it helpful for quick answers while typing. I use it for my own work as well and it has saved my keister on more than one occasion. The book is also available through bookstores or Amazon.

I hope I have been both helpful and encouraging. I look forward to reading more of your submissions in the future. Thank you for this piece. Smile smiley face

Sun on the Water · Mon Jun 13, 2005 10:29 pm

Wow. Well done. Glad someone's brave enough to go into his head, and I like that we didn't know who it was right away. Dang. I wanna go swimming!

... And Do All Such Good Works · Sun Jun 12, 2005 7:04 pm

Wow. Newbie exploring the site and I had to comment. I was mildly disturbed when she first woke up and am actually rather glad that we do not know which child she saw in her dream. How Boromir and Faramir interacted with women has always intrigued me and I was pleased to read your foray into that realm. I am also glad that you found such a poetic way to pay tribute to your friend. Big Hug smiley face

Annatar's Gift · Sun Jun 12, 2005 6:54 pm

So that's what a drabble is!!! Sorry, Newbie. Surprised smiley face

ops: Really cool idea. I like the description of the ring since I either don't remember or have never heard what the rings of power looked like. I take it the ring becomes very... precious to him? Wink smiley face

Well done.

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