Reviews by Rous

The Horn-Cry of Buckland · Tue Oct 19, 2004 11:21 pm

Very touching. I have read more hobbit stories lately. That is so unlike me. But this was so good. I loved the interaction. And as Nancy said, it shows the scars and whatifs that surely plagued those who did not said West. A wonderful jaunt down a path seldom taken. Thank you, very much.

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One Woman · Tue Oct 19, 2004 4:15 am

This is interesting. And it has great potential. However, it could use some more work. For one thing, you need a space between the paragraphs. It is difficult to read in its present form. There are also numerous grammatical errors. A spell check and grammar check would help. You should also consider getting a beta. I did not think I needed one, but it will help your writing immensely. One last thing; your story needs tightening. There are places where it tends to ramble. As I said, it does have potential, and if you are willing to work on it, it could really be a nice story. Thank you for sharing, and please, continue writing.

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Sun Oct 17, 2004 3:05 pm

Got to the last chapter. Bad ending. You should add more. Tomorrow. Or tonight. You could send me the unfinished chapters. I will beta them for you. Anything. Oh, just post some more, okay? And I told you not to use the "M" word, but you did it anyway. Now, how are you going to get out of that mess???? Very Happy smiley face

Aglarond · Sun Oct 17, 2004 4:30 am

*stands speechless, in awe, not daring to break the silence that surrounds her. Pausing, bowing in acknowledgment of the poetry that spills from the hand that penned this work of art; silently thankful for the sharing*

Final Confrontation · Fri Oct 15, 2004 11:30 pm

*sniffs back the tears* Hated the movie. Will not watch it. Stupid PJ for ruining it. *smiles brightly* However, your story was well written and conveyed a feeling that was lacking the stupid movie. If the elves had to be there, PJ should have let you script it. LOL Thank you, even though it was a bad idea. (Elves at Helm's Deep)

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Feeling Alive · Fri Oct 15, 2004 3:42 am

Beautiful poem, but I do not get the LOTR reference. I went back and checked the summary, but still. *shrugs* It is still a nice poem. And length is so subjective. Yours is just a few lines, my last one was six pages. It is the message and images conveyed. Thank you, for sharing.

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The Phoenix and the Griffin · Thu Oct 14, 2004 3:05 pm

Okay, you made changes I did not have. But, I will try to be honest and gentle. That was one of the most heart rending scenes I have read, and I am very upset that you made me cry. I can only say that I will try to do the same to you when I get that far in my story. Now that Phalia is broken hearted, fix it. You cannot leave her this way. She needs something. And if you use the "M" word, I will not read any futher.

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Rous

BTW, my popcorn is cold. Could you hurry up and post whilst I warm it up?????

Snorg: Letters from Mordor · Fri Oct 08, 2004 9:16 am

Too funny. You can thank inglor for this. He posted the url and I could not resist. I LOVED it. Can you do more?????

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Adaptation · Fri Oct 08, 2004 8:11 am

Very lovely story. The interaction was well meshed. Thank you, very much.

Mists of Beleriand · Wed Oct 06, 2004 7:10 am

Very well done. I really enjoyed it. Well written and very descriptive. Thank you, very much.

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