Reviews by Rous

Halls of Mandos · Thu Sep 16, 2004 8:00 am

Very nice piece. You caught the essence of the Elves' thoughts on dying very well. No pain, no regret for that, yet the feeling of waste, the lost lives for what he deems a lost cause. Oh course, dying before the end of the battle, he does not see it end well, nor does he grasp, I think, that the very presence of the varied races working together is what will forge the weapon that will defeat the enemy; cooperation. It was short, but managed to pack a lot of thought into the small space. I do not like movie based pieces on this very topic, since I am a big Haldir fan, but still, it conveyed much, and was worth the read. OBTW, HE DID NOT DIE! *looks around in embarassment* Sorry, could not resist.

Also caught the word error. 'except reality' should read 'accept reality'

Thank you.

For Whom The Bell Tolls · Wed Sep 15, 2004 9:37 am

Oh, what a moving piece. I must admit that I never gave the cave troll much thought. Okay, now I have no choice. Since you have such feelings for this poor wretch, what of the creature in the lake outside Moria? Did he not have a family? Just a thought.

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I don't wanna miss a thing. · Wed Sep 15, 2004 7:31 am

Sorry to concur, but I do. I read this mainly because I want to understand what a songfic is. So far, I have not read any that work for me. Either they overwhelm the story, as here, or they leave me wondering 'what was the point of that?' But I agree that the song should enhance the story, not the other way around. More like the words running through the character's head, rather than aloud for others to hear. The main focus should be the story. The song is icing on the cake. Too much icing, and people will not eat the cake. Maybe you could try just writing the story while YOU listen to the song, then if you feel it warranted, add some lines. I would encourage you to go back and re-write this. It is compelling and has great potential.

The Last Flower · Sat Sep 11, 2004 5:23 am

Nice. I have decided that Tolkien is a lot like the Bible (not comparing authors here, just the end work, LOL), he gives a lot of facts, but little in between them. It is left up to us to kind of fill in the little day-to-day doings that make up life. And while I love the world Tolkien created, it is a lot of meat with little garnish. Stories like this one help to add to the experience. I think I enjoy them almost more than the original works. Thank you.

In Which Frodo makes Tea · Thu Sep 09, 2004 5:59 am

Oh, my! That just tears at your guts. It was too poignant (is that possible?). I had no trouble with figuring out when it was taking place. However, I do feel that a tense change is warranted when you go back to the first time he makes the tea. "Frodo set about the task happy in the thought that Bag End was now his home." It should read, "Frodo had set about the task, happy in the..." I reread it, and most of it did follow the tense correctly. Other than minor punctuation issues, this was excellent. Kudos to you. And popcorn. And Buttershots. I do not really read Hobbit stories, but I will gladly open a bottle for this one. Thank you.

Her Look at Frodo · Wed Sep 08, 2004 5:48 am

A nice little fluff piece, but the grammar and spelling do distract. Your word processer program should have at least spell check (and maybe grammar check, but I can tell you from experience that it kicks up almost every line 'sentance fragment'. Very frustrating when writing poetry). If you do not have these tools (you may only have notepad or wordpad), then maybe someone could read it over for you. It would really add to the enjoyment of your poem. And it is enjoyable. Keep at it.

Bitter As Blood · Tue Sep 07, 2004 6:08 am

So unlike the cartoon Boromir of the movie. I hated him from the first time I saw him. What a mess Gondor would be in if he survived to inherit the Stewardship. This piece gives him strength and character. Shows him a man who thinks of his people. One who strives to save his city, but not at any cost. I could really like this Boromir. Thank you. Very well written. I look forward to looking up some of your other stories. Drunk smiley face

Ashes, East Winds, Hope that Rises · Tue Sep 07, 2004 5:55 am

Interesting and well written. I cannot wait to finish it. Ah, for more time in the day. LOL Thank you.

Thranduil's Bargains · Mon Sep 06, 2004 9:31 pm

Chapter 15 left me wanting. Wanting more. I really like this story. Do not tell Havetoist, but I read your update first. (Okay, it is at the top of my watched stories). But even so, it is a great read. Thanks.

Snowfall · Mon Sep 06, 2004 4:51 pm

Very nice. I loved the humor and rivalry between the two of them. Without the stress of the Ring, they found they could be friends. Thank you.

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