Reviews by Havetoist

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Tue Sep 18, 2007 5:14 pm

5292165 said
Almost three months. Are you stlll there? Are you still writing? Please say you are!

I am! RL has frightened away my muses, but am certain they are slowly returning.

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Sat Sep 30, 2006 5:42 pm

samarrra said
> I've loved this since I started following in '04 but I'm very bad at reviewing. Surprised smiley face

ops: I have to ask now that I'm starting my 3rd version; have you been revising or why has the chapter numbering been changing? My imagination?
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samarra~

First, thank you for sticking it out with me!

Second, I combined a few chapters. That's all.

The Half Breeds · Mon Jun 12, 2006 1:23 pm

Finally.

You're back.

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Fri Jun 09, 2006 6:24 pm

Crispin said
> Please tell me it's not over ! This time the story had a feeling of finality to it. It made me sad to think I may not read about this family again ! Say it's not so !

Oh, no. It's not over with yet.

New Magic - A Tale of a Blue Wizard · Sun Jul 24, 2005 9:26 pm

A baby? What a surprise!

And as always you never fail to deliver. Pardon the pun.

The Phoenix's Griffin · Sat Jun 04, 2005 1:27 pm

sanriogirl said
> Hey, great story, liked it a lot. However, your Hungarian lines are in need of some correction... there are some typos, and some words are not suffixed properly (for example "férj", one would not say that, rather férjem - my husband- or férjuram -my lord husband-, or some endearment. )
> But otherwise, I liked it a lot.

I appreciate your taking the time to leave a review. Any review is a 'good' review imo.

Let me address the improperly suffixed 'endearments'. I do agree that ONE wouldn't address her husband as merely husband, but soften it with 'my'. But I opted to drop the possessive aspect of the endearment and turn it a little on its ear with a slight implication of dominanation and submission....a very palpable, or so I believed, element of the pairs relationship.

Thank you again.

New Magic - A Tale of a Blue Wizard · Sat May 21, 2005 11:20 pm

Congratulations on your nomination.....

And now we must sit and fume/brood with Celeborn and wonder what next?

My Girl · Tue May 17, 2005 3:50 pm

Anieni said
> I am in awe at the strength and beauty of this piece!
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> I will go seek more of your writing, if this is in any way indicative of the rest I am sure it will be worth well reading.
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Ohhh. I don't know about that This was a huge departure for me. But thank you for thinking I may be able to sustain this style for more than 8 pages.

The Cursed Queen of Angmar · Sun Jan 23, 2005 9:52 pm

I have finally read this story.

This is one of the most original and wonderful works of fanfiction I have had the pleasure to read.

I have added it to my recommendation list.

The Feud of Shadow and Light · Fri Jan 21, 2005 1:41 pm

KhazarKhum said
> It's an interesting start to a story. What will this little conflict due to the morale of the Elven armies? Will a dispute over a girl cheer Sauron?
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> Rous has mentioned the punctuation slips. Not too many of those. You might want to consider some wider spaces between scenes. As it is, it is an extremely fast read, almost too fast for its own good. Your characters must be more fleshed out; I had quite a bit of trouble visualizing them and differentiating between the Elves at the wedding.
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> Now some things which you will have to answer:
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> Why is she on the battlefield, so close to Barad-Dur? How long has she been there? The full 10 years??? Elevs are usually hesitant about starting families in time of war; was that why she was betrothed but not married?
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All very valid questions that aren't meant to be answered per se. It's a set up story for my other fics. The confusion of the 'wedding' is intentional.....happy to see it actually was effective!

K

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