Reviews by SpaceWeavil

And in the Darkness Bind Them: Vol I · Fri May 20, 2005 2:02 pm

Thank you all for your comments and thank you KK for your honesty. There are a few spots where I'm going to edit Estelince' lines / descriptions in the previous chapter, just a case of removing a few words here and there, to try and make him a little less two dimensional. My image of him, as I've said to you in PM, was very different and I actually enjoyed writing him, but maybe my writing has been lacking and some of the nuances haven't come across, like the incident in the inn earlier with Marillion's colouring.

At the moment, I won't be editing anything drastically or deleting any chapters, although I have taken your comments on board and am considering if Estelince needs to be removed entirely from the story. I want to give this more thought, as it would involve a radical rewrite of this next section, and might have knock on effects for other plot lines that I need. I'm not particularly 'attuned' to this fic at this particular moment, as I'm in the middle of studying for my law finals, but I will give it some consideration when I am more in the right mood and can think about this clearly. As it stands, I'll post the next few updates as is, since Estelince isn't in those chapters anyway, and if I do decide to redraft this section again, I'll make that clear so as not to cause confusion.

Obviously, if anyone has any further opinions on what can be done to improve the story, don't hesitate to let me know, either here or in PM, and thank you all once again for taking the time and effort to help me out on this.

Space Weavil

The Circles: Book One: The Triumph of The Shadow · Fri May 20, 2005 9:55 am

Since I'm working on a slightly mammoth Witch King story myself at present, I had to have a look at this, and so far I have to say I am really impressed. Your description isn't overbearing or too weighty and yet still provides such an atmosphere. Also I'm very impressed by the amount of research - the Old English alone gave Rohan a real flavour as I was reading. I'm not usually very keen on AU stories, but this one has me interested since it is so well written, and I'm very keen now to see where the story goes.

Welcome to the site and thank you for posting Very Happy smiley face

SpaceWeavil (certified Nazgul lover)

Perfect Creation · Tue May 17, 2005 1:51 pm

Excellent portrayal of Feanor and a nice twist on the challenge topic - as always lovely writing. Very Happy smiley face

30th Nárië · Sun May 15, 2005 4:44 pm

You have such an insight when it comes to Boromir, and once again you've managed to get that understanding of his character across extremely well in this drabble. This was a very interesting way to look at the challenge topic, and it worked very well, in my opinion. The writing though was what struck me as the best factor in this piece; your imagery and voice throughout the drabble was evocative and poignant, especially the line about the Harlong having such precious cargo. It was a really clever use of language. Seriously, this was great.

The Long Burden · Sun May 15, 2005 4:39 pm

Lovely writing all throughout. You captured the characters wonderfully and the description was amazing. Very Happy smiley face

Interrupted Journeys: Part Three--Journeys Begin · Thu Apr 21, 2005 10:30 am

I have been so lax in reviewing this fic and I feel lousy for that. Finally I have had a chance to read your latest chapters, now that work is slowing down a bit, and I am so glad I finally made the time to do so. I still find it amazing, even after reading 10 chapters and knowing how well you handle your characters, that you can still surprise me with the depth and colour you give to Thranduil. This fic puts my own lame attempts at capturing him to shame. I have never seen such a well rounded and realistic portrayal of him - something that is aided both by your skills at creating these 'moments' from his life, which were never described in the texts, and from the loveliness of your prose. I almost feel like I know Thranduil as a friend, after having read this story.

I promise from now on to be more diligent with my watched story alerts, because this really is such a joy to read.

The Light I Hate; The Darkness I Love · Wed Apr 20, 2005 10:45 am

Love the imagery in this drabble, especially the final larger paragraph (about the animals and owls and stuff). Very evocative, which is a clever thing to achieve in so few words. Well done. Very Happy smiley face

Perhaps Tomorrow · Tue Apr 19, 2005 9:57 am

Aww, SML this is so touching and sweet. I don't believe it but you made me cry and that's the first time anyone's done that in 100 words. Just the idea of finally settling while you're not quite settled to the idea of settling - I can relate to that a lot.

Please pretty please write a Bilbo in Imladris fic sometimes. Please. As Ghettoelleth would say, I'm going all fan girly here.

Double Trouble · Sat Apr 02, 2005 9:58 am

I've never read any of the AU stuff referred to and so I can only give an opinion of this piece on its own. It's a nice scene and you have a very distinctive 'voice' in your writing style, which is good since this is a scenario that I've seen a lot. The only thing I kind of stumbled on is that I can't imagine Celebrian saying 'bull', even in a humour piece. Sorry. Surprised smiley face

ops: But that might just be me being picky - I'm not that keen on modernisms in fics. (but that's just personal opinion) On the whole it was quite enjoyable. Very Happy smiley face

"Alive" and "Broken" · Wed Mar 30, 2005 9:26 am

Alive - so excellent. I loved the 'butterfly kiss' sentence, and the final line was really wonderful and summed the whole relationship up admirably.

Broken - After 'Alive' I was taken completely by surprise by this. I was expecting something dark and intense, but not the humour. Fantastic. The last line is priceless and even with only a 100 word scene, I can easily visualise everything. I'm still laughing now...

Very enjoyable.

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