Reviews by SpaceWeavil

Shepherd of the Trees · Tue Jan 11, 2005 12:23 pm

Interesting beginning. I'm not usually that keen on 1st person perspective as a reader, but so far you seem to carry it off ably. Very Happy smiley face

The idea of Thranduil being upset at the thought of his people living out of the sun is one I haven't really seen explored before, so I'm interested to see where you go with this.

The Trees Remember · Sun Jan 09, 2005 7:43 pm

Firstly, apologies for not reviewing this sooner. Me bad Surprised smiley face

ops: But really, this is an excellent beginning to a really interesting story. Maybe silly, but I found myself really touched by Elrond and Celebrian seeing their sons off. Don't know why but that bit just hit me Very Happy smiley face

And I am really intrigued to see how everything all works in. So far your research in linking ME to the modern world is fascinating. Kudos Cool smiley face

Part Two - The Taking of Vanelossë · Sun Jan 09, 2005 11:58 am

Just read chapters 3 and 4. Nicely paced and the violence didn't bother me particularly as I thought you didn't go too far with it. Just enough to see the pressure Vanelosse was under and to empathise with her situation. Looking forward to reading more, and hopefully seeing Legolas get a bit of revenge Twisted Evil smiley face

A Cake For Two · Sat Jan 08, 2005 11:40 am

Yes, very nice little scene, and thanks for supporting the 'Thranduil-wasn't-actually-an-insane-abusing-father' Party Very Happy smiley face

I also liked 'little' Legolas. Very cute.

A Flight Broken · Sat Jan 08, 2005 11:37 am

I was trying to think of something really clever to say and all I could think of was 'awww' Laughing smiley face

Such an engaging story. Reading this you could feel Pippin's excitement and then the ending was just such a contrast. Really nice work Very Happy smiley face

New Magic - A Tale of a Blue Wizard · Sat Jan 08, 2005 11:31 am

Very original idea and thank you for giving some story space to the Blue Wizards - characters we really know nothing about Very Happy smiley face

The descriptive passages are particularly good. I liked the 'languid' and slightly decadent Thranduil Wink smiley face

Can I ask (and this is a 'question', not 'criticism'), is Faron an OC or from the texts somewhere? (Was just wondering Cool smiley face

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Very interesting idea though. Looking forward to seeing where you go with it.

Part Two - The Taking of Vanelossë · Tue Jan 04, 2005 7:36 pm

I know I left a slightly critical review of your other story, and I'm glad you didn't take offence or think I was being mean. This story, on the other hand, has great potential and I think you've made your OFC a lot more rounded in this story (IMO). I will admit that, as the 'wild child' I did find her a bit annoying Laughing smiley face

but actually I can see how you've altered her through your story arc and I'm interested now to see what happens to her. I can see now why (in a literary way) you had her the way she was. I think you have a lot of potential, building on the character you established first of all, who really had no proper worries or cares, and letting us see her cope with what's happening. So far you seem to be doing that (in particular, I thought the line about her never having been touched violently before was very effective, since that did, for me, put across the shock of that attack.) I also liked the fact that you were not overly graphic with that particular scene. I get squeamish Wink smiley face

So, I am interested to see where you go with this. Cool smiley face

Oh, edited this because I forgot to mention; also I much prefer the style of writing you use in this story. It's not as 'modern' feeling IMO as the other, and actually for me that makes it easier to read.

Alone Facing Darkness · Sun Jan 02, 2005 7:30 pm

Thank you for updating. The quality of this fic certainly isn't waning, and I'm looking forward to seeing the next chapter. Everyone's reactions are still very well crafted and I can visualise it all. Well done once again

A Battle of a Different Kind · Sun Jan 02, 2005 7:09 pm

This is a really good story and I love the interactions between Eomer and Eowyn, especially after the fight. The most effective line though I think was at the end, as Eowyn went to face her 'other battle'. A nice reminder of the tension in the Golden Hall. Also if English isn't your first language, may I just say how impressed I am. I only wish I could get one of my languages up to that standard Very Happy smiley face

Although there were a few little things I noticed, on the whole the language and especially the dialogue was excellent. (If you did want a beta, btw, then there is a forum here where you can advertise and get someone. Don't know if you knew that already Cool smiley face

I for one don't mind helping. Like I said, I really enjoyed this story.)

Once again, well done.

Friend of The Berror · Mon Dec 27, 2004 2:50 pm

I would have to agree with Nancy and Andreth - you have an interesting and unusual idea here, and it's only hindered by the spelling errors. With a bit of proof-reading your work could be very good indeed. This has a very good rhythm to it, and would flow very nicely, as well as putting your idea forward well.

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