Reviews by Yavanie

Surrender · Thu May 26, 2005 1:04 pm

“Endless sunshine, so long as you are with me.”
Okay, I really choked back the tears on this one. The contrast with the happy couple on the verge of that sunshine and the contrast with Erestor and his plight - just wow!! the play of shadow and light you weave throught the scenes is just, well, attention getting, it keeps the reader hanging on every paragraph. You've painted all the characters endearingly well, even the micromanaging mother-in-law!! looking forward to more!!!

Silence · Tue May 24, 2005 10:42 am

OOOH! I get to be first!! Yay me! I just want to say how much I have enjoyed this piece of work. Though Tolkien mentioned female characters and often hinted at their inner strengths, he rarely gave us much detail. I think you have captured the essence of what it would have been to be Nerdanel and have your fea bound to one such as Feanor. And I think you well captured the weight of her husband's decisions that she carried, with grace and dignity. A match for him, she never sacrificed her pride but never lost her compassion either. I am glad you liked the few comments I made regarding changing anything. Your readers must know that most of my comments were about how much I liked your descriptions, word choices and points of view. Well done. A truly emotionally evocative bit of writing. Looking forward to more.

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Sat May 21, 2005 11:35 am

Wow! I can't believe I haven't reviewed this story yet!! What an oversight on my part!!! I am loving this story. It is captivating. The way you write the characters, one can't help but fall in love with each of them. Through all these chapters I have laughed, cried, worried, and watched. For such a long story you have kept all the details nicely together and the story line flows smoothly. Your characters are so very accesible and yet so unique. Very, very rewarding to read this and especially when that little message pops up on my email that yet another chapter has been posted!!! Very much looking forward to more!!

Rider of the Mark · Thu May 12, 2005 7:18 pm

WHEW! I think I held my breath through that whole chapter, except at the end when my brain was screaming NO! you can't leave it there!!!! Truly captivating. Inspired, even genius, especially having seen the scenes in the movie, it was very real. Clever and effective use of the repeated phrases. Still thinking the mental phrases running through Gamling's mind without punctuation is very effective in conveying the very immediacy of his thoughts. Shall breathe a while and await the next installment.

Surrender · Thu May 12, 2005 4:10 pm

OOH! I am am so glad you decided to continue this story!!! Elrond was my first Tolkien elf infatuation at a very young age. I've always thought him the most intriguing character the professor presented, beginning with The Hobbit. I am in awe how you seem to have captured his personality and the revealing of his character to us through his experiences. The uncertainty, self doubt, compassion and humbleness are well revealed in your writing. I also very much like how you are developing Celebrian as she spreads her wings and ventures from under her mother's shadow. I can't say enough, well then Erestor has already said it: they are well matched. The very touching portrayal of Erestor is so poignant. Touching on his own losses and how he can indentify with Elrond and his loving thoughtfulness for his friend and his chosen bride with his offer to design the rings and then his sweet attention to having such a soon to be cherished item be a suprise and delight to both recipients. Once again, in just a few words/lines/paragraphs you have hinted at much depth beneath your characters outward appearance. Well I don't feel I have adequately put it into words, but I am so looking forward to the next chapter!!!

Knives in the Dark · Thu May 12, 2005 8:57 am

Space, once again thinking outside the box!!! You had me thinking about poor Butterbur and his fears for his fellow Breelanders and then all of a sudden -- reality strikes! Act of God!!!! That was so totally unexpected! Once again, you score, big time!!!

Return to Middle Earth · Mon Apr 18, 2005 4:30 pm

“When you have killed your first Balrog, you get to lead.” OH that's just IT!!! So very Glorfindel and love the banter with the twins! Sinead is also great, so half and half human/elf and half and a half of middle earth/from the future. SO glad you're muse back!!!

Rider of the Mark · Mon Apr 18, 2005 9:15 am

This is just so....so.. .wonderful and frustrating and wow, more please?? I just love the way you portray the horselords, all of them! So no fangirly! they are alive and masculine and real and you just fall in love with all of them!! Again, you are crafting another masterpiece! Bravo!

Forever Yours · Sun Apr 17, 2005 9:35 am

Oh this is precious. If his heart melts any more for her, Legolas will be reading him the riot act about his little sister!! And since she is yet young, this story could last a while - goody!!! looking forward to more.

Envious Moon · Sat Apr 16, 2005 2:24 pm

Wow! just Wow! Where do I begin? Well maybe thanks to Al for the plot bunny! This is no PWP! It's all plot!!! I can't believe that in one chapter you sucked me in so well! You gave just enough description of all the characters to feel that they had a history and we could identify with them. The have emotions and desires that are deep and not just plot devices.
And honey! Between the forge (thanks for the strong female craftsman and warrior in one) and the passion, whooo baby, pass the ice chips!!! Excellent! A pleasure to read!!!

just have to edit this and say - Great Graphics Too!

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