Reviews by VanatheEverYoung

Before I go to sleep · Fri Dec 03, 2004 10:20 pm

This is a really great start. I like the simplicity of the atmosphere. It's very hobbit-y Laughing smiley face

I know it's hard to explain the backstory of an OC in an interesting way. I think you did an admirable job. My only concern is that the switch from present tense to past tense between the Prologue and Chapter 1 was slightly confusing. I did notice a few formatting errors that you may want to take a look at. Towards the end of the Prologue, you have a Beta comment in parenthesis. Also, you have the beginning quotation marks at the bottom of the line, rather than the top. I look forward to seeing where this fic is going. If the Prologue is any hint of the ending, then I believe I will not be disappointed. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading Laughing smiley face

More Than Memory · Fri Dec 03, 2004 7:08 pm

I am a little late in reviewing, I know, but I just found this story. I adore Eowyn. The memories of Aragorn, Faramir, and Arwen really hit on everything I love about her; her suffering, her strength, and her courage. I couldn't image Eowyn being remembered any other way than what you wrote. The tone was perfect; chilly and bittersweet, like Eowyn herself. I almost cried reading the first chapter.

Coming Home · Thu Dec 02, 2004 9:18 pm

This was my first time ever reading a hobbit story. I came into it with the idea that I would stop reading after the first chapter, but you really drew me in. In fact, I think you've ruined me for other hobbit writers. I'm a PEF, and that's about all I read and write. However, I will be taking a look at your other stories very soon.

The Other Day... · Thu Dec 02, 2004 8:27 pm

How did I miss this when you posted it? Hmmm smiley face

"And neither ent could miss the irony of these young humans, shouting about the rights of the forest and of nature, when none of them noticed the two talking creatures on which they were sitting."

As a self-proclaimed Tree Hugger, that really hit home. Sadly, I have to admit that it's true. I recycle, I don't litter, and I don't trample saplings. But have I ever just looked at a tree and admired its age and beauty? No, I haven't. Perhaps better than your amazing storytelling is your ability to make readers contemplate their own actions.

Mind Games · Thu Dec 02, 2004 8:10 pm

I always appreciate a good Arwen story. It's a little intimidating to write about her because so many people dislike movie-Arwen. Personally, I love her. I enjoyed this glimpse into her mind. I agree with Viv and SpaceWeavil. I understand a little better how her fate is tied to the Ring. There were a few mistakes that you might want to correct, but nothing really distracting. The quality of the story more than made up for any typos.

A Short Rest · Tue Nov 30, 2004 5:13 pm

What a great interlude! It is a situation I never really thought of while reading "The Hobbit." I imagined several LOTR characters being in Rivendell when Bilbo and the dwarves stayed there, but for whatever reason, Aragorn never entered my mind. I love stories that explore the history of friendships. This is a great version of Aragorn and Bilbo's friendship, and a nice glimpse of Aragorn as a carefree child. I loved the part about him not wanting a lot of names. In fact, I snorted Sprite because of that line.

The Closest To Heaven · Sat Nov 13, 2004 1:47 pm

Of course this is another wonderful story, Vendie. The idea of elven death is so bittersweet. We know they go to Mandos, but its still so damn sad! Excellect job explaining those conflicting emotions.

Finding Home · Sat Nov 13, 2004 1:37 pm

A very good start. I'm interested to see where this is going. Her Native American heritage and name is very interesting to me. I live in an area where the Miami culture is still celebrated. I wonder if her Indian heritage will connect her to nature? Kind of like the elves are connected to nature? I'll be checking back to see if I'm close. Laughing smiley face

Elrohir and the Very Stupid Caterpillar · Wed Nov 03, 2004 7:23 pm

That is too good! I haven't cried from laughing in a very long time! ROFL smiley face

Into the West · Sun Oct 24, 2004 7:52 pm

That was a great ending line! Frodo is completely cured now that Sam is with him. It's so sweet without being sickening. Good job on staying on the right side of that fine line! I only have one question: Would Bilbo still be alive? I mean, if Sam is 77, then Bilbo would be beyond ancient!

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