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Dreamcatcher (G)
by saborice.
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 5:13 am
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Sweet. One tiny fix: in the book, Faramir's eyes are grey, not golden. Otherwise lovely.  |
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Cravings (PG)
by WinterTouched.
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 5:09 am
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*falls over laughing*
Oh I LOVE your oblivious little 36-year-old-virgin Faramir. Priceless. |
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Breath of Life (NC-17)
by Sharpeslass.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 19]
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Mon Feb 13, 2006 4:53 am
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*points to previous reviewers*
What they said. With a side order of GUH.
you win. |
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Beyond Ice and Fire (PG-13)
by Gypsum.
Chapters [6]
Reviews [ 3] Warnings [Violence.]
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Fri Aug 05, 2005 10:46 am
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A good idea, and the quality of the writing is fine, but it felt rushed. Let your language be a reflection of the scope of these events. The Dagor Bragollach was a battle that spanned immense time and geographical distance. You seem to have a good understanding of where everything is, but it feels miniaturized for the sake of the scene. Description! Not a whole lot, but enough to give a sense of seperation between one thing and the next. Too much dialogue all at once can tend to turn into a script. Gesture, pause, observe, react. There is a richness in your subject well worth exploring.
I tell you all of this not to be a nitpicky twit, but because I think you have the capacity to DO it, and I would love to see it done with these characters in this setting. This part of the histories are sort of my pet obsession.  I've actually been thinking of writing a similar story focusing instead on the battle on the marches to the East of Dorthonion, where Gorlim fought and Bregolas was killed. |
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Beyond Ice and Fire (PG-13)
by Gypsum.
Chapters [6]
Reviews [ 3] Warnings [Violence.]
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Fri Aug 05, 2005 10:45 am
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A good idea, and the quality of the writing is fine, but it felt rushed. Let your language be a reflection of the scope of these events. The Dagor Bragollach was a battle that spanned immense time and geographical distance. You seem to have a good understanding of where everything is, but it feels miniaturized for the sake of the scene. Description! Not a whole lot, but enough to give a sense of seperation between one thing and the next. Too much dialogue all at once can tend to turn into a script. Gesture, pause, observe, react. There is a richness in your subject well worth exploring.
I tell you all of this not to be a nitpicky twit, but because I think you have the capacity to DO it, and I would love to see it done with these characters in this setting. This part of the histories are sort of my pet obsession. I've actually been thinking of writing a similar story focusing instead on the battle on the marches to the East of Dorthonion, where Gorlim fought and Bregolas was killed. |
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Lullabye to Ladros (G)
by Halfwest.
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Fri Aug 05, 2005 4:21 am
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LuthienTinuviel said
> Urm.. no offence... but from which part of the Tolkien world is this lyric-poetry based on?
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> Not bad....
Get out your copy of the Silmarillion.
Open it up to Chapter 18.
Skip two paragraphs down. There will be a break in the text.
Start reading.
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Jewel of the Hunt (G)
by fileg.
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Mon Nov 17, 2003 12:06 pm
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| Love it. LOVE it. Purr. Gorgeous imagery. Lovely style. Good metre (*gasp!*). Exquisite work. |
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The Tale Of Eilinel (PG-13)
by MordorTari.
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Wed Aug 20, 2003 8:24 pm
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GORLIM HAS FANFIC!!!!!!!!!!! *dancedancedance*
Ahem. Despite the few shortcomings of this story (which I shall get to later), I am inclined to worship it BECAUSE IT WAS WRITTEN! I have wondered many times why nobody has bothered with Eilinel, and while I don't particularly -agree- with your interpretation of the character, it is nevertheless a very solid and well thought-out characterization.
Let me say also that this story has moments that are INCREDIBLY strong and poignant and more than make up for the parts that I don't like so much.
Critiques:
The setting was what got me more than anything. It doesn't hold with how I imagine Ladros. And the flow of events also differs greatly from my view, although the more I think about it, the more it seems possible that Eilinel could well have been enslaved by Sauron for at least part of the five years he spent living in the woods. But these are merely opinions and if I were not such a fan of Gorlim, I would neither have noticed nor cared that she is not at all the way I imagined her.
You grammar seemed a little bit off in spots, but not enough to effect the overall mood.
In summary, this is a fantastic work of fanfiction and I intend to flaunt its existence to the other players in an RPG where I play Gorlim. 
In case you didn't know, more of his story is told in the Lay of Leithian. I've typed it out into Gorlim's RPG profile which can be found here:
http://www.livejournal.com/userinfo.bml?user=gorlim
Furthermore, if you're interested in reading my take on her finally leaving Gorlim, that is here:
http://www.livejournal.com/users/gorlim/9228.html
And as a parting note... YAY FOR WRITERS OF OBSCURE CHARACTER FANFIC!!!!!!!!! |
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