Reviews by Elvenesse

Rebirth · Thu Feb 17, 2005 12:15 pm

I was slightly sceptical about the Valar having an elf re-inbodied in Middle-earth, and her being all alone middle of the wood.

However, the descriptions were lovely and by the end of the chapter you'd pulled me into the story. Now Thranduil has his wife back! That must give him even less reason to go to Valinor, 'though I supposed they'd want to join Legolas eventually. Smile smiley face

False Faces · Thu Feb 17, 2005 9:43 am

Hi Alisha,

Yay! I get a chance to read this story again. Nice opening scene, with a hint that the storm isn't a completely natural occurrence. Would Saruman know of Aragorn’s existence at this stage? I suppose he would though, as Elrond would be highly unlikely to keep him hidden from the head of the White Council.

I have a few small nitpicks if you'd like me to PM, or email them to you.

- Elvenesse/Kate

Despised and Hated · Mon Jul 26, 2004 1:17 pm

I found this a powerful poem, and even though it's short it evokes some frightening imagery.

Cry No More · Mon Jul 26, 2004 10:49 am

I enjoyed this. It has a lovely rhythm and I think you've captured Rosie's voice and Sam's character very well.

A Song For The Forlorn · Mon Jul 26, 2004 10:33 am

I'm sorry, but I don't see how this is connected to Middle-earth.

A Hole Possessed · Mon Jul 26, 2004 10:25 am

A twisted romance indeed. I'm still giggling.

Ish Chronicles: Sins of a Race · Sat Jan 17, 2004 7:52 pm

I'd have to agree with your first two reviewers, you could do with checking your spelling and grammar. There's nothing wrong with a few mistakes, but reading through your story isn't that difficult and suggesting that you do so doesn't mean people have "writing pretensions", it would just show that you care about your story.

Also, you should probably label this "AU", as Aragorn, Thranduil, Legolas, etc. are very much out of character, you portray them very differently to Tolkien's characters and therefore they have become something that merely bears the name of the characters you are trying to write. AU doesn't mean you have changed the timeline - it means significant changes (although, to me, AU is usually in answer to a 'what if?' type storyline).

Just because we don't know how or when Aragorn and Legolas met doesn't mean that Legolas is a sadistic bastard and that Thranduil is a wimpy, indulgent ruler.

I'm sure if you toned the story down and asked for beta help (as most of us do) on this site or elsewhere, it could be good! Smile smiley face

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