Reviews by Sulriel

The Man on the Street · Wed Mar 08, 2006 9:19 am

These are lovely snippets of dialogue, but it doesn't necessarily work *for me* in a couple of ways.

Within the context of the challenge of an unnamed character
- this is about Merry, certainly not an unnamed character, and while your speakers aren't named either in LotR or in your drabble, it seemed *to me* that the spirit of the drabble was to be an individual, and this seems to be the bits of convo that Merry heard as he continued walking - so I don't see that you've identified (even without naming) an unnamed character. ... Different from, for example, one unnamed individual commenting as Merry walked past. I could have mis-read that, but (to me) the dialogue doesn't seem so connected that it's from an individual as much as it seems to be from various individuals.

along those same lines, while the bits of dialogue themselves are delightful, ... [[and I especially enjoy your ability to portray an emotional scene through dialogue without description, (in general, I enjoy a balance of description, but so frequently see it overdone, it's a wonderful surprise to find such a flavorful bit of dialogue without it)]] ... and while I know that drabbles are only loosely defined, I still like to see a complete thought, and/or a beginning/middle/and end -which this passage doesn't seem (to me) to have.

Lovely Night · Wed Mar 08, 2006 8:32 am

very much enjoyed this last chapter. Smile smiley face

The emotion really comes through in your characters.

Fatty no longer · Tue Mar 07, 2006 9:53 am

Hi Nancy.

I read this and find the writing is technically polished and that the pace flows well for me.

What I found odd is that he put up with his name being mocked - it seemed to be the 'fingers in pie' comment that got him going, but the focus in the last line is back on his name rather than on Estella's protection and honor. It seems (to me) as if you've ended a different story than you were telling.

I realize you're restricted to 100 words, and I feel that overall you've done well within the context of the challenge, but I'd have liked to see a little tighter focus in the ending as to the reason for the pounding.

Hope this helps.

Becky

Those Also Serve Who Stand and Wait · Sat Mar 04, 2006 10:31 am

I saw this as the story of the day this morning, and I'm so very glad to have read it. I've often seen people criticize Tolkien for his lack of strength of female characters, but as you clearly show, while he may not have spotlighted them in his own writings, they certainly are there for those of us who care to look. Indeed, the homes must be kept if there is to be anything to return to, and sometimes that takes the greatest strength of all.

Condemned! · Fri Mar 03, 2006 9:52 pm

This is so sad. I know a lot of the Noldor were left in the ice. ... such a harsh end for a people who'd only known light and beauty for most of their long lives.

Shadow-folk · Thu Mar 02, 2006 7:57 am

Well-done. I agree that in many ways, Finarfin's strength and will are under-rated.

Culture Clash · Thu Mar 02, 2006 7:47 am

LOL! What fun! What a silly princess to misunderstand such a fine compliment.! Wink smiley face

Lost · Wed Mar 01, 2006 12:14 pm

excellent. I agree with the hints that Bill maybe deserved being chased, but as they say, even the Great don't see all ends ... where would the Fellowship have been without Bill the Pony? Smile smiley face

Life of a Woman · Wed Feb 22, 2006 7:27 pm

I find this to be a lovely message of hope in spite of the dangers of life. You packed a lot into the 100 words. Smile smiley face

Hope · Wed Feb 22, 2006 8:18 am

a very nice portrayal of hopelessness and then hope.

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