Reviews by Viv

Faces in the Snow · Tue Nov 21, 2006 2:08 pm

*The snow that settles on his features is reluctant to melt. * This is one of the best descriptions of an elf that I’ve ever read (and I’ve read plenty). How appropriate for Boromir’s point of view, too. The brief description of Frodo was right-on too. But it’s the presage of Boromir’s relationship with Merry and Pippin that makes this piece powerful. This peek into Boromir’s mind explains why he is so protective of the hobbits, enough to die for them. Lovely work.

Bitter · Tue Nov 21, 2006 12:08 pm

This fic gets at the core of the Feanorians, I think. They all must have felt this, to one extent or another. So much effort and then poof: Feanor himself is crispy. And there's still an oath to be held, even when the oathmaker himself is no more. Feanor go toff easy; he just left his whole family to suffer afterwards. Great insight!

Mind Games · Tue Nov 21, 2006 11:27 am

Ha! You'd think a chick with such control over her mind and others' would be able to control such a simple thing as a blush. It's the little weaknesses that doom the superheroes, eh? Personally, I wouldn't mind being able to read Wolverine's dirty mind, but that has more to do with a Hugh Jackman thang. Wink smiley face

Who? · Tue Nov 21, 2006 11:24 am

Yay Doctor! Loved the bit about old news. It *does* seem that modern London gets over alien invasions fairly quickly, all things considered.

Avoidance · Sun Nov 19, 2006 10:47 pm

It's hard to imagine Cpt Picard skulking about the Enterprise, but if there's anyone who can OOC Jean-Luc, it's Mrs Troi! (And I could completely hear Worf here, right down to the forcible restraint impliedf in the last sentence.)

A Journey Unplanned · Sat Nov 18, 2006 10:00 pm

You may want to consider reading this piece out loud to yourself. There are a few lines (such as "But the creature ignored them as I ignored the many cuts I already had and leaped for me once again." and "By the gods, how many had seen her naked?" [should be "me" in a first-person piece, I think.) that I don't think say what you mean them to say. And that's a pity, because I think you have a really nice action sequence at the beginning, and written in first person, too, which I think is harder. Also, you may want to take a look at a resource on comma usage: Generally two independent clauses are separated by a comma (that old "comma before 'and'" thing from grade school). I *really* like how you introduced her interesting appearance and history, without making her seem Sueish. Nice little character study!

A Moment Stolen · Fri Nov 17, 2006 10:01 pm

Love this line: "His clothes were falling as fast as Orcs at Mordor." That's just the sort of metaphor Haldir the warrior would think. It's hard to get into the head of a character when you just have 100 words to work with, but that sort of interior imagery is exactly what does it.

Watch how I soar... · Wed Nov 15, 2006 11:44 pm

*sniff* I was pinned by that line, too. The Zoe character is so magnificent; she deserves fic, and especially one so poignant.

Draco's Reflection · Mon Nov 06, 2006 2:56 pm

Chilling insight into Draco's character. He's a lot more self-reflective than I would have given him credit for, but I think it works. Definitely it makes him a sympathetic character, at least in this piece. Kind of reminds me of those old mob movies where you had the regretful wiseguy trying to redeem himself after a lifetime of crime, but the Family kept pulling him back in.

Chronicles of Narnia: Remnants of a darkened mirror. · Mon Nov 06, 2006 2:48 pm

I really liked this line: "Of all the things he once was and had, all he now had left was his faith." I think Lewis would approve of it, too. Smile smiley face

Intriguing start on the story. Hope to read more soon.

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