Reviews by Viv

Debbie Does the Fellowship · Wed Aug 13, 2003 6:03 pm

Oh, to be Debbie. *sigh*

Jewel of Great Price · Wed Aug 13, 2003 5:45 pm

This was a lovely moment in the mind of Finduilas, a character most folks tend to brush aside. Indeed, as you've written her, I can see that even in her own eyes, she might have ignored her own needs and wishes. Although the piece overtly concerns Boromir, I saw it as a lilting and certainly sad portrait of Finduilas. Beautiful writing, as always, of course.

Celebration · Tue Aug 05, 2003 9:46 pm

Weeeeeeeeeee! What gorgeous smut! And with *Eomer*. Gah. You are Exquisite Smutstress!

Snaga · Tue Aug 05, 2003 3:45 pm

This is one of the most intriguing opening chapters I've read in a long time. I've very much been looking for a good fic that delves into the "other" side of things. Very creative and interesting. If anything struck me as odd, it was the black speech. I'm sure you've done a hoard of research to get it down just right, but having another language appear in a fic (and then to have it translated right there) is distracting. It also limits the dialog a little and shifts the focus away from the story.

I hope you'll continue this story soon... can't wait to meet the upper-up baddies. Smile smiley face

The Tale Of Eilinel · Fri Aug 01, 2003 10:46 pm

There were grammatical errors and formatting problems and Tolkien-canon oopses... I should have hated this story. But I loved it. Loved it from the opening bit to the very end. This line made it tough to breathe: "Oh Gorlim, you told me you wanted me to be yours one last time before you left, and I answered that I would rather be dead."

I loved your characterization of Sauron, of his blue eyes and silver tongue. And I loved the corruption of a mortal, a little thing really to Sauron.

In the end, I'm rating this story with the highest marks. Not because it's good grammar, but because it's excellent storytelling.

Bloodlines and Lifestyles · Thu Jul 31, 2003 11:16 pm

Although the information wasn't exactly new, your presentation was very clear and almost lyrical. I enjoyed it almost as much as a piece of fiction. Naturally, I had hope that you'd located a bit of info I'd overlooked, that suddenly someone would say precisely who Legolas's mother was, or when he was born. There are so many mysteries surrounding this character, and I've heard theories that the vagueness was deliberate: so that hte Elf in the Company would not be a named elf, per se. He would be representative of all elves: Eldar and Teleri, young and old, sea-obsessed and tree-loving. Well, anyway. I'm off on a tangent. Thank you so much for taking the time to write it all down. And for doing so in such an engaging essay voice!

Coming of Age · Thu Jul 31, 2003 11:03 pm

What a delightful little episode. It takes on a bittersweet quality, though, when I start thinking about how much those happy, mischief-making brother would have to endure in later years. Oh! And I loved Huan being "in disgrace for rolling in a mud puddle." The mighty hound indeed! I love reading about the sons of Feanor, and you bring them to life so skillfully in this piece. Will you write more about them?

Life after the Battle · Thu Jul 31, 2003 7:00 pm

This is an interesting premise, and I'm looking forward to your developing it. One suggestion (and it's a big one): please invite someone you trust to beta this piece. Sometimes we writers read our own work so many times that we miss simple grammar and spelling errors. Everybody does it. But a beta can really help. Other than that... Nice. I like how you've implied that this is Aragorn's first encounter with mass carnage. And Tolkien does say elsewhere that Aragorn travelled extensively in the south, even fought with the Gondorians in his earlier years. Was that what you were thinking? I'm not sure you even need to continue... his shock and horror are sufficient insight into his character. Well envisioned!

Some Years Ago in Greenwood · Thu Jul 31, 2003 7:01 pm

Exquisite research, and nice sense of space and time. I loved all the many and complicated canon references, and the pieces that you made up fit in seamlessly. Will you be writing more of the second-age elves? Am looking forward to it!

By and large, you have an elegant narrative voice. In a few spots, the sentences went on rather long, so that by the end I couldn't remember how the sentence started. Sometimes it helps to count words: if there are more than 30 in one sentence, that sentence probably needs to be broken up a little. Alternating sentence lengths can really help pacing, but it's tricky when you're going for a high-epic voice.

In the Midst of Adversity · Tue Jul 29, 2003 7:38 pm

Thank you for letting me be along for this ride. As I told you when I read the final version of the epilogue, I was close to outright tears. Not just because the scene was heart-wrenching (it was), but also because I will miss this story, now that it's over. The characters have become very dear, and though I knew it would end some day, it was, inevitably, bittersweet.

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