Reviews by Rous

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Tue Jun 08, 2004 6:42 am

I finished what you have. You DID say this was a WIP, did you not? I see no progress. Come on, give us something. My popcorn is cold and now I have no more Buttershots. I think I will go write another chapter on my own story. So, there. Welcome, back.

A Cry For Sleep · Mon Jun 07, 2004 5:50 am

Great premise. I really liked the story, but if your word processor has a grammar check, or a thesaurus, you may want to try that. There were a few mis-used words. They were spelled correctly, just not the right words. Ex: conscious instead of conscience. Also, commas used differently would help grasp the meaning quicker. Otherwise, a good job. Sorry, just an anal English major. I finished the story, so the grammar was not too bad. Hope to see more.

We Survived Because of Me! · Thu Jun 03, 2004 6:10 am

Great piece. Pronoun shifts should have bothered me, also, but then, that is Gollom. He was not very grammatically correct. All in all, a job well-done. But, criticism, too short. Now you must write something else. Go, write.

The Phoenix and the Griffin · Wed Jun 02, 2004 5:10 pm

I am up to chapter five. I am hoping a lot is explained from the second story. So far, I like this. Still looking for a desirable ending to Phoenix's Griffin. Have not seen it yet. Get busy.
And wherever will you post it?

In the Dark · Tue Jun 01, 2004 6:10 am

Very well written. So much insight into Frodo. It shows the change from a carefree Halfling to a man of true courage. Thank you.

Gifts of Life · Thu May 27, 2004 4:10 pm

Very touching. I can see the two of them conversing in just that way. And over beer. Great read.

Butterfly-Cocoon · Thu May 27, 2004 3:56 pm

AzureDragoness said
> The whole story has a plain, simple air to it, which just makes reading Ela's rapid-fire question sessions funny n__n I can't wait for even more answers to the questions, like who are Ela's parents? What IS she, exactly? Will she ever stop being afraid now? Will she ever stop calling Elrohir 'elf'?????
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> Hippy smiley face

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She will only stop if Elrohir asks her. Do you see that happening? As for her parentage, her grand-sire will be an eye opener. I hope Master Tolkien does not roll too far over in his grave, but he left it wide open.

(Sorry for the edit, but made a boo-boo. Now it is fixed)

Curious Coldness · Wed May 26, 2004 6:37 am

Liked it alot. Just a short side trip on the journey of life. It is the side trips that make the journey worthwhile.

Defense Enough · Wed May 26, 2004 6:29 am

Very nicely done. I love these short pieces that give more insight than just to tell the story. The detail was good, but did not overshadow what I perceived as the main of the story; the thoughts and emotions of the main character.

Butterfly-Cocoon · Tue May 25, 2004 10:16 pm

Mei said
> OMG, I'm hooked. I love little Ela--and she says the most ingenuous things! I can hardly wait to find out her parentage. Love her interactions with everyone, especially the odd understanding she has with Haldir and how she keeps calling Elrohir 'elf'. More more more please, with a chocolate covered elf on top?? Bounce smiley face

Okay, I am posting another chapter because you offered me a chocolate covered Elf. I love chocolate, and can I pick the Elf? Guess who? And your story is not too shabby, either. I will trade you chapters. LOL

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