Reviews by Ilmatar

A Bride for a King · Mon Nov 07, 2005 12:13 pm

Oh poor girl. It must be dreadfull to have all those questions and not having anyone to properly answer them. Very Happy smiley face

I loved the conversation; the way she fired questions at him, and how he did his best to avoid giving an answer. Her wanting those "warm" feelings back and wanting to know where they can lead her or them was a really great passage. Boy, is she in for a surprise. Wink smiley face

I am glad her brother enlightened her about Eomer's feelings, and I agree with him... their union will be very good entertainment. Smile smiley face

I can only manage One · Mon Nov 07, 2005 11:32 am

I certainly did not expect that to happen. Lothiriel showed some real courage, and I think it really impressed Eomer too. You made her reaction seem so natural and the way she recued the baby really fitted her character. Sometimes authors make their leading ladies perform unbelievable heroic/stupid acts to show that they have character, but this was just right. Smile smiley face

Very good.

The action scene fitted the story very well, and I am glad this story had so many different aspects. It is always nice to be surprised as a reader, and this surprise surely was positive. Smile smiley face

I loved the brandy. Very Happy smiley face

I wonder if she is going to do something silly.

I can only manage One · Thu Oct 27, 2005 5:18 am

The poor girls of Gondor. Their parents keep them well protected, and then they meet someone like Eomer. Loved him (not very surprising, is it? Very Happy smiley face

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The part where Eomer spoke about the march to the Black Gate, and how in his mind Lothiriel represented all the good things in the world, was very nice. It cannot be a bad start to a relationhip. I also liked the fact that he confessed that he had already been in love once.

They way she literally fell into his arms was great. I think poor old Lothiriel is going to seriously lose her heart. Gandalf is not a bad matchmaker... Laughing smiley face

I can only manage One · Wed Oct 19, 2005 2:02 am

Bema! I wonder who just came in through the door! Smile smiley face

I think Lothiriel's efforts are very sensible and in a way very sweet. I quite like the fact that allthough she is not too keen on the idea of marrying Eomer and becoming the Queen of Rohan, she is still making a real effort to get to know the customs and the history of the people.

I love the fact that she is so concerned about her hair. Laughing smiley face

Without a doubt I would be too. I also loved the bit where she decided that it would be a good idea to discuss war strategies with Eomer over the dinner. I mean, that is definately the most important thing to know about your husband: his thoughts on weapons and war. Wink smiley face

I suppose it just shows how nervous and inexperienced she is. How sweet.

thanks again for writing such and entertaining and well thought out story.

Ilmatar, the serial reviewer.

An Offer Not To Be Refused · Sun Oct 16, 2005 2:52 am

The sister-brother interaction was wonderful, you have really succeeded in describing the nature of a relationship that siblings share.

I loved Eomer's realization in the end of the chapter. It must be a scary and exciting feeling to be bethroted to someone you are crazy about without knowing what the other person thinks about the situation.

I am looking forward to find out what Lothiriel's thoughts are, especially about the kiss. I bet the next part of the story will be more than interesting. Smile smiley face

I can only manage One · Tue Oct 11, 2005 5:09 am

Nice to see you updated so soon. Smile smiley face

I love the eight feet tall thing. I don't know why, but I just find it hilarious: like that would be the biggest problem. You have really managed to create a very girly Lothiriel. I quite like her with her insecurities and all.

I am eaderly waiting for the next installment.

An Offer Not To Be Refused · Mon Oct 10, 2005 2:35 am

I loved the beginning. It certainly had me confused for a couple of seconds. At first I thought he was dreaming, but then it turned out to be totally different story.

This chapter really gave a better perspective of what is happening in Arda after the war. Sometimes author's just make things seem as if the war had no impact what so ever on the people and the general conditions. You really have made things realistic, and I liked the interaction between the old wise ranger and the young king with a bad temper. I love the way the chracters develop in every chapter and how their personalities become more and more alive in the process.

I really hope Eomer is still alive in the next chapter. Wink smiley face

I am really looking forward to his reaction.

I can only manage One · Sat Oct 08, 2005 7:24 am

I really like your series. Each story is different, and all of them are good.

I really like this one. The situation is very interesting and I am very interested to see (read: dieing to see) how it all works out. I understand her reaction to being engaged to someone she has never met. Personally, I think it would be horrific. I imagine there will be sparks of different kinds flying when the two of them finally meet, and I hope Lothiriel will at least give him a chance. This could easily result in her deciding to hate his guts forever regardless of how he treats her. Luckily Eomer is so hot that she will have to give in sooner or later. Smile smiley face

Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Very Happy smiley face

Gathering of the Fellowship · Mon Oct 03, 2005 11:16 am

Hello there!

As Tylany above said the story attracts readers easily, and I think it could be very entertaining. However, there are some things that need to be improved.

You should edit the layout. It is hard for the reader to actually read the story if it is not divided into paragraphs. Also, conversations are easier to follow if you insert a break every time the person who speaks changes. Just look up any story here in OSA, and you will find an example for the formatting. I assure you more people will read your story once you make the changes. Smile smiley face

I think you should also get a beta-reader. There are spelling mistakes and sometimes the tenses are a little confusing. There is a beta reading thread in the forum, and I think you will find plenty of people there who can help you. I would do it myself, but since English is not my first language, I do not feel competent.

Other than that the story can become a good one. Smile smiley face

I think I have never seen a story that actually reunites the fellowship. Smile smiley face

Keep writing. Smile smiley face

I hope you update soon.

Imrahil's Daughter · Mon Sep 19, 2005 9:27 am

How cruel can a cliffhanger be? I think this was as cruel as I can take. Smile smiley face

I loved the scene where Eomer talked to his kinsmen. I think it showed how he is gradually becoming a king. I am glad you wrote the scene, and I really like the fact that the fic is also about Rohan, and not just our leading couple.

Take care,

Ilmatar

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