Reviews by Viv

Autumn's Requiem · Fri Jun 27, 2003 5:47 pm

Oh, wonderful! Not just one more chapter, but two! I've been holding off, not wanting to read this during break at work, and a good thing too. Scorching, ladies. And beautifully so. I loved the image of Frodo on the bed, his arm over his eyes, telling Rose to wait for Sam. Very compelling. Thank you so much for writing this!

Help Him · Tue Jun 24, 2003 7:14 pm

First: *YES* a gollum piece. Second: I don't know much about poetry, but that read just beautifully. The pathos bombarded from all sides, and the last few lines were excruciating. I could *see* gollum looking up and seeing his own reflection in Frodo's face. The injustice was so obvious and compelling. Thank you for sharing this.

Bondage · Tue Jun 24, 2003 7:10 pm

The writing is very smooth, engaging. Despite the fact that I'm not a big fan of second-person stories (they remind me of those choose-your-own-adventure stories from grammar school), this was a compelling bit o smut. Very nice.

My Heart · Tue Jun 24, 2003 6:59 pm

This is the best one yet in your series, queenie. I dig. And feel free to expand, as sindohte suggested Smile smiley face

Autumn's Requiem · Mon Jun 23, 2003 7:00 pm

I don't usually go in for hobbit fic, but thought I might take a peek in at this one. The first word had me hooked. You ladies write hobbit-voice beautifully I'm amazed that PJ didn't contact you as a resource. This story is beautifully written, easy to get lost in. I don't usually beg, but please, please will you continue?

Fallen · Fri Jun 20, 2003 4:33 pm

First person present tense, for all it's grammatical simplicity, is probably the hardest way to write. You, however, do so very well. You only slipped into past-tense once ("He turned to leave, and I threw myself forward, my hands tangling in his cloak"), and that is easily fixable. My favorite line was toward the end, "They nod approvingly as I slip the mask of duty over my grief, and allow the demand of noble blood to straighten my shoulders." That is Eowyn in a nutshell. You've captured her entire history in that sentence; she evolves from that starting point. If I were editing, this piece, I might suggest that you revisit the last line. The chuckle seems a little odd; Gimli, after all, has seen more death in the last couple of months than he's probably ever known. All in all, a very well-written piece. Thank you for letting me peek into the mind of Eowyn.

Forgotten Allies · Fri Jun 20, 2003 4:22 pm

Argh! I have been restraining myself from reading this, so this review is a unique thing: a review of a story I haven't read. I've been writing my own little 21st c. meandering, and I don't want to be tempted to filch any of your ideas. But I just wanted to let you know that this story has been recommended to me several times now, and the second I finish Dawn Twilight, I know what I'll be reading Smile smiley face

My Lady · Thu Jun 19, 2003 7:33 pm

Okay. So that was an interlude. Now I must know what naughtiness the king of gondor is cooking the rest of the night. Oh, please let him be tantric!

My Love · Thu Jun 19, 2003 6:17 pm

Two words: Wet Legolas.

Gah.

Adrift · Thu Jun 19, 2003 6:13 pm

Oh, no. The disconnect is poetic; don't try to smooth it out! I really felt like I was in Eomer's head.. and it was a pretty scary place to be. I wonder if folks who really have seen war can relate. Somehow I think they might.

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