Reviews by ellisk

A Tale of the Sixth Age · Sat Jan 29, 2005 4:09 pm

This just keeps getting better and better--the language and dialogue in it are priceless. Usually I love your works for their description but in this one the dialogue just has me rolling. I love the dry humor. And the characters--just twisted!

Gandalf's plan is awesome. I am loving this one and I never read 6th Age stuff. This is great.

Haldir and Elzabeth : Healing · Fri Jan 21, 2005 8:05 pm

I largely agree with everything that has been said. I think you have great potential as a writer. You have the mechanics of it well under your command (spelling, grammar, sentence variation etc). You dialogue is good. You do need to work on develping the plot more thoroughly and smoothly. I have a suggestion for that--I have a really good friend that also likes Tolkien but she says she doesn't like writing so she won't do her own stuff. I come up with an idea and outline it as thoroughly as I can. Then she and I sit down and thrash it out. She asks a lot of 'what would happen here?' and 'how would this person feel here' questions. That really develops things thoroughly. And if you get a beta from the forum, you could get those modernisms out of there. That puts off a lot of the Tolkien fans to be honest and it is hard to learn that stuff at first unless you've read a lot of history or historical fiction.

A Tale of the Sixth Age · Sun Jan 16, 2005 1:51 pm

This is just priceless. It is an outstanding social commentary on the true evil in today's world. And the Mordor Burgers and other various references make it just hilarious. Like "The Other Day..." this is a wonderful view of our world and what's wrong with it. I love your writing in general. Your descriptions are your strong point though your characterization is always dead on as well. But outside of fan fic you really could find a living writing social criticism like this. You have a very sharp wit when it comes to humorously poking fun at our world. Lots of people, such as Matt Groening, make quite a lot of money on this in the States. You should consider it because this is great stuff.

Tickle-Goblin · Sun Jan 16, 2005 8:00 am

A very cute view of young Legolas and Thranduil and your version of his wife. I don't think that makes it AU at all. Legolas had to have a mother! Smile smiley face

I like to see PlayfulAda!Thranduil instead of Evil!Thranduil so thank you for the chance to see him. And Legolas' complaint about Selda's reaction to Tickle Goblin was exactly how a child would react I think. Very cute.

Burning Heart · Fri Jan 14, 2005 8:55 pm

You are off to an intriguing start--one cannot help but wonder what brought the elf woman to Lothlorien without her husband and fading in childbirth. There is potential there for some very angsty twists. Good job.

One little suggestion and a question: Look out for picky little things like the possessive 's. There are couple places where you forgot the apostrophe. A beta could probably help you catch things like that and they are friendly on this site. Smile smiley face

Now the question--I wonder if this baby will be the Narya you refered to in your summary and if so, is there any connection between her and Gandalf's Ring of Power by the same name. Hmmm.

Look forward to reading more.

Fell Beast · Sat Jan 08, 2005 9:12 am

*Snort* This was sick, SW. Just sick. I bet you had fun with this and so did we. Thanks.

A Cake For Two · Sat Jan 08, 2005 8:01 am

A very sweet moment between father and son. Well done. I enjoyed it.

The Trees Remember · Mon Jan 03, 2005 10:05 pm

I like this. I will definitely be watching to see what you do with it. A number of things have piqued my curiosity.

The History Of Legolas – Thranduil and Almwen · Sun Dec 12, 2004 6:25 pm

Very nice. An elfy sort of discussion. I like how they are slowly moving together. Sorry for the short review. I am going out of town--I just wanted to let you know I'm enjoying it and I'll be more detailed later.

Distant Maiden · Sun Dec 12, 2004 7:31 am

This was nicely done. I like pieces that explore the inner emotions of characters and I think you did a nice job here. I also liked the descriptions. I definitely think a "Eowyn's perspective" follow up is in order. I'd love to see that.

You obviously have really strong instincts as a writer since you do such a nice job writing (showing/not telling) character emotions and descriptions. One of the wonderful facilities here at OSA is the forum where you can find people to beta read before you post. That can catch mechanical details like a few grammar niggles. I take advantage of that because I am not a native english speaker so that's how I know it really helps me.

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