Reviews by Rous

The Tart…! · Mon Sep 11, 2006 2:01 pm

Well, the title led me in one direction and the story ended in another. Now I am dizzy and in need of something. Oh, I know! More reading.

Thank you for sharing this. It is quite enjoyable.

Horse & Rider · Thu Sep 07, 2006 4:49 am

Oh, quite nice. This is the way I felt when I rode. It is as close to flying as you can get without actually leaving the ground. Wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. I am very glad this was featured today.

rous

Too Sexy · Sun Sep 03, 2006 12:38 pm

Caught this on the featured story. Thank you for sharing.

Can't Take His Medicine · Thu Aug 31, 2006 6:09 am

I like it. Although Merry sounds more like Pippin to me. Still, a little stuffing for the bare bones the author gave us. Thank you for sharing, and so glad this made featured story so that I could read it.

Rous

Shades of the Immortal · Sat Aug 26, 2006 11:31 pm

Wish I could add something new. This was wonderful. It speaks of the loss of a major part of the land. Just beautiful. Thank you, so much, for sharing. I am truly thankful this was featured today.

Drunk smiley face

Winter in Rohan · Wed Jul 19, 2006 6:53 am

Love this. I caught it on the featured story. What a wonderful glimpse into the live of Rohan.
Thank you for sharing.
Drabble on!

Too few have come... · Tue Jul 18, 2006 9:15 pm

Very sharp imagery. The statement is valid and strongly delivered. If there is anything to be said about this, it would be that the word "and" is used over-abundantly. Also, the line:
"But they were Rohirrim. And a valliant death is better than a life not lived." would benefit from a difference in punctuation.

"But they were Rohirrim, and a valiant death is better than a life not lived."

Also, "...before steel; steel of sword..." should have a comma more than a semi-colon.

And, again in the last line: "They are Rohirrim. And while they draw breath they will fight."
I think a semi-colon here: "They are Rohirrim; and while they draw breath, they will fight."

Just my opinions, mind you. Otherwise, this is everything everyone else has said, and more.
Thank you for sharing. I was happy to find this on the featured story. Too many good fics go unread, I must read every one that is posted. Smile smiley face

Fortress · Mon Jul 17, 2006 5:47 am

Found this in the featured box. Wow, this is powerful. Of what you have written thus far that I have read, I think this strikes me as best. The depth and emotion belies the second part of the title.

I do know that you use quite a few modernisms in your writing, but I still find it disconcerting. There were also a few repetitions. Otherwise, I really love this; the humbling of the proud brought down by love is such a touching subject.

Thank you for sharing.

Death's New Toy · Tue Jul 11, 2006 9:48 pm

Caught this on the featured story. While this is nice, it is very A/U, which was your intention, just not my cup of tea. There are quite a few grammatical and spelling errors. Cleaned up, this would not be bad.
Thank you for sharing.

Rous

Phone Call to Imladris · Wed Jul 05, 2006 3:29 pm

I can so relate to this. I loathe voice menus. And, I can see the normally complacent losing it totally.

On the other hand, I can honestly say that this needs work. The humour is there, but the grammar is not. If I understand correctly, you hail from Germany. You need an English-speaking friend to go over this with you. You have used some words incorrectly and puncutation needs attention.

I have the utmost respect for anyone tackling English as a second language. It is my understanding that it is the most difficult to learn do to lack of grammar rules, and just up and forgetting those that exsist.

Thank you for sharing.

Rous

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