Reviews by SpaceWeavil

The Boundaries of Time · Sat Dec 11, 2004 4:44 pm

So far I've enjoyed this story and am looking forward to more. There has obviously been a lot of work put into it, and though I would agree with the points Andreth has made, it is also obvious to me that you're have a lot of talent as a writer and a lot of skill. I actually like the descriptive passages, but I do agree with Andreth, there's a little too much description during the 'action' scenes. (And I am seriously guilty of the same thing, it must be said, as several long-suffering beta's have pointed out Cool smiley face

). Shorter sentences for instance can produce a more hectic or urgent feeling in the scene.

As Andreth has said, though, please do not be discouraged. I will say again, I think you are a very talented writer and that it would take very little to make this a superb story, as opposed to a good one. You've picked a very interesting part of LOTR history to write about, and one I personally haven't seen done too often, so I will be watching to find out what happens along the way.

All the best
Jess

So few... · Thu Dec 09, 2004 1:39 pm

I don't usually go in for drabbles, but this one has very good structure, given that it includes dialogue. I'm impressed. Very cleverly done and it is poignant to read. Very Happy smiley face

Alone Facing Darkness · Wed Dec 08, 2004 10:17 am

This is the third draft review I've written for this as I've been struggling to find something that will do you justice. I am extremely impressed with the fluidity, accuracy and style of your writing. I'm not an expert on the HP books, although I have read them all, but what struck me right away with the story was that it *felt* as though I was reading the next book. YOu obviously know your stuff in the HP universe and if you can pull off the same sort of canon accuracy on the LOTR parts, we ought to be in for a really interesting and entertaining story. The premise is intriguing, as is the development at the end, as I thought with the 'reborn spirit' motif, that you were going to have another quest in modern 'Hogwarts' time, if you get me. So I am really interested that you didn't take the obvious path and am looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Of course, I'm hoping for more LOTR stuff, but I understand these are the opening chapters, so I shall be patient. Very Happy smiley face

And just to cap it all, you had a Lucius cameo, (which, showing how sad I am, was the first thing I hoped would be in there somewhere Twisted Evil smiley face

Gotta love the bad guy...)

Anyway, I digress slightly. Surprised smiley face

ops: Well done on the two chapters you have so far. I'm looking forward to the updates and sticking this on my watch list.

Rider of the Mark · Wed Dec 08, 2004 10:04 am

I have to agree with Viv in that I was a bit...confuzzled is actually the best word I've heard to be honest Laughing smiley face

But saying that, the prose-poetry style, particularly at the beginning was compelling reading. Somehow the rhythm of it helped suck me in as a reader. It is also nice to see a (again for want of a better word) less-used character get the spotlight. I haven't read any, but I assume from your summary that poor old Gamling gets a lot of slash dedicated to him, so well done for setting the record straight. (Excuse that pun, it was actually unintentional Confused smiley face

)

Snow · Tue Dec 07, 2004 6:48 pm

A very nice story. I particularly liked Faramir's reaction to the orc incident. Very realistic.

Mirkwood and Beyond · Tue Dec 07, 2004 6:45 pm

I'm not sure if this is a problem with transferring text onto this site from another application or not, but there are a lot of very odd errors throughout the piece that make it quite difficult to read in parts. They don't look like typos or spelling errors to me, more like something hasn't quite translated properly. I'm not mentioning this to be horrid or nasty, btw, as I know how irritating it can be when you put work into something and some technical gremlins somewhere work against you. Wink smiley face

Jess
(Just trying to be helpful)

The Twelve Days of Waiting · Mon Dec 06, 2004 1:36 pm

I like the way you're working in facts from the film so well to the various numbers, if you get what I mean, but what I find most interesting about this is the novel approach you've taken to posting this. I would never have thought of posting each 'day' separately in real time, but now I think about it, it is a very original idea. Only one point though, as a Brit, I only have to wait till Friday for my RoTK EE. Just thought I would add that to annoy those who have to wait till the 14th Twisted Evil smiley face

Well done on the story though and I must remember to check this one each day. Very Happy smiley face

Gollum's Lament · Mon Dec 06, 2004 1:31 pm

Nice. I don't tend to read a lot of poetry online, just a personal preference, but I liked this. You captured the sadness in Gollum's obsession nicely without it being overly morose, and added sinister elements here and there that gave the poem a shivery quality that was very much in character. Very Happy smiley face

This Too Shall Pass.... · Sun Dec 05, 2004 3:13 pm

I've just realised the true meaning of the story's title... ROFL smiley face

I have to admit there are moments in RoTK particularly (movie version) where I wished a fell beast would do just that to Sam and Frodo. And the idea of having to house train one...

Anyway, very funny and not over-the-top. The subtle way you let your readers know what had happened made it all the more funny. Well done. Very Happy smiley face

A Jewel Above Rubies · Sun Nov 28, 2004 12:48 pm

What a wondeful story and an excellent idea. Your OCs were believeable and very real, and I could seriously feel for them in that situation. It's nice to see a story focussing upon the 'unnamed' victims of the Fall of Gondolin and what they went through. Very Happy smiley face

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