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The Calling (G)
by LuthienTinuviel.
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Sun Feb 13, 2005 12:43 pm
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| I think this is a fine poem, on its own, the voice being very plaintive and mysterious. But I have trouble hearing it as an Elven Warrior. |
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Fell Deeds, Awake (G)
by Marta.
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Sun Feb 13, 2005 12:38 pm
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| Well written as always, Marta, and with some very fine and original turns of phrase. That film moment always bothered me, too; I very much like how you linked Gimli's current adventure with some very likely and vivid past history - well done! |
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Eomer's ward (G)
by rohanion.
Chapters [7]
Reviews [ 11]
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Thu Feb 10, 2005 2:17 pm
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| This is a good backbone for a story, but came across almost as a very detailed outline. Just needs some punctuation oversight and more texture - characterization, feelings, descriptions. We need to know what matters to your characters, where they are and how that tells the story. |
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The Masters of Buckland Have Always Been Romantic (G)
by Saoirse.
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Thu Feb 10, 2005 2:12 pm
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| Wonderful! Brought a tear to my eye, I will gladly admit. This would have been a lovely story even without it's final revelation; with it it's just that much more wonderful. I particularly liked the teasing and loving tones you got from M E , very fitting for a married couple in love. |
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Beyond the Borders (G)
by Marta.
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Thu Feb 10, 2005 12:15 pm
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| Again, Marta, you've done a remarkable job at getting into your characters heads at wonderfully mundane and exemplary moments in their lives. While you draw Elrond out and give this known character some lovely new depths, your completely new character of Halbeleg is likewise a full and strong character. Well done. |
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The Battle of Evermore (NC-17)
by CalypsoAntigone.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 5] Warnings [Sex, Drugs, Rock 'n' Roll]
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Tue Feb 08, 2005 1:57 pm
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| Well written and intriquing. I'll look forward to seeing where you take it. |
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Gandalf's Heart (G)
by LuthienTinuviel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 3] Warnings [A bit of sillyness.]
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Tue Feb 08, 2005 1:54 pm
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| Very clever! I think a lot of folks would take this challenge very seriously - and come up with some very serious fic. But you have taken it seriously and come up with a very humorous fic, that is nonetheless not lighthearted. Well done. |
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Paths We Tread (G)
by LuthienTinuviel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 7] Warnings [The usual hanky.]
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Thu Feb 03, 2005 4:43 pm
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Twice in as many days I've been given a deeper appreciation of Legolas - what's the world coming to? 
I very much enjoyed reading this. I thought your depiction of Legolas very insightful, and his struggle with the Gift of Men most convincing. I missed hearing the fond gruffness of Gimli's voice however. I thought your choice of more formal and flowery language there made him sound, if it's possible, Elvish!
Watch out for those tense changes! |
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Lessons Learned (G)
by karushna5.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 12] Warnings [Aragron]
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Thu Feb 03, 2005 8:00 am
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| Aha! very funny ... you had me worried for a minute there. I remember those feelings; you almost made me feel young again! |
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Awakening (G)
by Galadriel8891.
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Thu Feb 03, 2005 7:51 am
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Well done. I thought you imagined Eowyn's unconscious experience very well and interestingly. You stepped surely over unknown ground and mapped it very originally. Perhaps you should have stopped there? The other sections struck me more as filling in the blanks of what we had seen on the film; ground we've been over before. It somewhat dimmed the experience of reading the very original and imaginative section that went before.
Also, wondered why Eowyn would think her dying would justifiably punish Eomer: "would serve him right ..." for what?
But again, great beginning: original, well-conceived, and well-written. |
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Last edited by NancyBrooke on Thu Feb 03, 2005 7:58 am |
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