Reviews by NancyBrooke

Roac and Roll · Sat Jul 12, 2008 3:10 pm

Oh How the mighty have fallen! Great job, Eira.

Conspiracy · Sat Jul 12, 2008 3:08 pm

This is fun, but I miss knowing who is talking when. I didn't even know there are three speakers until we get three names very late in the drabble. And I wish I knewwhat they were planning, although I realize that is not the point. Yes, you leave me wanting more, but not necessarily in the best way.

The Fire Within · Mon Jul 07, 2008 11:33 am

Phew! Excellent work, Neume. Do you know what I love best? The pacing - how everything unfolds in its own good time and every intensifying detail adds to teh richness of the story without every rushing it.

Êl-galad Êl-celair · Mon Jul 07, 2008 10:07 am

I like the way so much background information is woven in here without taking away from the narrative or standing out as exposition. You create an intriguing portrait of the emerging adult here in the child, again without being at all heavy handed or obvious.

Heart's Cord · Fri Jul 04, 2008 5:33 am

This is excellent work, Sully, really first-rate. There are so many fabulous moments, I'd be pasting the whole thing in here to give examples. You did a wonderful job of creating a Hobbit character who was full, individualized, deeply *hobbitish*, but in no way childish or precious as some fan-Hobbits are portrayed. I loved his obsession with food, using rope terms like frayed to describe his feelings (giving him a specific framework of being), and his family history so lightly woven in here. Your writing never has a false step or stilty word. Plus I got a giggle over your gestures toward Goldberry considering our recent conversations about Tom and Viv's entry in this challenge.

For me a work has to be damn near perfect to get a five-star rating; I gave this five stars.

Paradise Lost · Thu Jul 03, 2008 3:44 pm

Like you, I have never read the Silm all through, but you were so good at weaving the salient points of Miriel's story through her thoughts that they didn't feel like exposition at all and that is hard to do. I like the way her feelings and thoughts keep moving and changing in this ficlet. That reads very realistically.

I Hate You, Goldberry · Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:55 am

This is just fab-u-licious! There is nothing funnier than showing up the common ordinariness in something rare and fine and you have done it here with such cleverness and panache! Just awesome! You Go Gurl!

Shards of Courage · Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:49 am

Excellent job, Alassante. You should write first person more often! Your Ohtar is drawn out of obscurity just fully enough that he seems to create the events around him instead of the other way around which had to be your writer's process given what you had to work with. And, more than that, you've just crafted an interesting and compelling story with good characters. Well done!

Lilac · Thu Jul 03, 2008 9:26 am

You did a great job here, Ania. Your Gilraen is a very realized character, in keeping with what Tolkien gives us and very much newly realized at the same time. I particularly liked that you not only let us experience Gilraen's grief and growing acceptance through her experience, but also found a symbol for it - the Lilac.

Wife of the Thain: Old Tales of the Shire · Wed May 28, 2008 3:17 pm

These first two (I hope!) drabbles are really lovely, intense and interesting. Lead us on!

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