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The Feud of Shadow and Light (PG-13)
by Havetoist.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 6] Warnings [Language]
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Sat Dec 04, 2004 9:26 pm
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It's an interesting start to a story. What will this little conflict due to the morale of the Elven armies? Will a dispute over a girl cheer Sauron?
Rous has mentioned the punctuation slips. Not too many of those. You might want to consider some wider spaces between scenes. As it is, it is an extremely fast read, almost too fast for its own good. Your characters must be more fleshed out; I had quite a bit of trouble visualizing them and differentiating between the Elves at the wedding.
Now some things which you will have to answer:
Why is she on the battlefield, so close to Barad-Dur? How long has she been there? The full 10 years??? Elevs are usually hesitant about starting families in time of war; was that why she was betrothed but not married? |
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A Light Lost to Shadow (PG)
by ADionne.
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Sat Nov 20, 2004 6:59 pm
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Lovely little vignette. I always though Mians Tirith was built on a mountain of marbel, so the sight of dark earth seemed off--but that's a minor point.
And of course the bitches stole her food. That's what people do in time of war. |
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Fly, O Man (G)
by Cadiliniel.
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Fri Oct 01, 2004 7:19 pm
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There isn't really anything here which points *clearly* to Denethor. At first I thought you were describing a Nazgul at the end of the war. Some of the lines do not scan particularly well--"rather" really breaks that line. "But" might have been a better choice.
But the emotional impact is good, and the imagery of the cut wings striking. Right now it's a near-miss; some slight editing & it's a hit.  |
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Comrades (G)
by Amaroth.
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Sun Aug 29, 2004 2:04 pm
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Nicely done; the characaters are consistent with film canon. I am not 100% certain that there needs to be a prologue; the scene with Elrond could just as easily been at the beginning, instead of separate. Considering how brief that scene is, it might be better to simply condense the whole piece int one chapter. Just a thought!  |
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The Cursed Queen of Angmar (R)
by KhazarKhum.
Chapters [51]
Reviews [ 154] Warnings [BDSM, violence, rape, torture]
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Wed Aug 25, 2004 3:44 am
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Thank you! There should be more soon; I don't have to do the Mithrils right now, and my time is now free! And Ariashal has loads of plans for my time.  |
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The Cursed Queen of Angmar (R)
by KhazarKhum.
Chapters [51]
Reviews [ 154] Warnings [BDSM, violence, rape, torture]
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Mon Aug 23, 2004 7:22 pm
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Thank you Sinda and alll.
As soon as my poor beta is done, the next chapter will be up. I promise that the next one will follow soon after. |
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Finrod's Oath (PG)
by JMac.
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Mon Jun 07, 2004 5:54 pm
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| An excellent Silm story, well-told. Both powerful & poignant, it brings the events to life. |
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Eternally (R)
by Ellbee.
Chapters [9]
Reviews [ 25] Warnings [Sex]
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Thu May 13, 2004 6:23 pm
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| Wonderfully elegant love story; the pairing is not overdone, nor is she condemned to the hellpits of the Mary Sue. It probably didn't need the smut to be erotic, but smut never hurts. |
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The Cursed Queen of Angmar (R)
by KhazarKhum.
Chapters [51]
Reviews [ 154] Warnings [BDSM, violence, rape, torture]
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Fri Apr 30, 2004 12:33 pm
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| Right now I'm up to my earlobes with the Mithril Awards... as soon as I can, I will update this one. they are at least staying quiet, and letting Herumor play nurse. |
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The Cursed Queen of Angmar (R)
by KhazarKhum.
Chapters [51]
Reviews [ 154] Warnings [BDSM, violence, rape, torture]
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Sun Apr 18, 2004 1:07 am
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| Hopefully soon--the Mithril Awards are starting, and they tend to vacuum up all of my time. But the next chapter has been started, so it should be along soon. |
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