Reviews by Kalythianna

Winter Fire · Sun Oct 24, 2004 8:32 pm

At this point I'm pretty spreechless. What an amazing story!!! Wonderfully written, an d all.

Are you planning a sequel????

ADionne · Mon May 31, 2004 10:20 am

Oooooh I was so thrilled to see you're story. Like Taethowen I love almost ANY story that involves the Rohirrim!!! I really enjoyed reading this chapter, I noticed a few things... (theses, ? instead of '... ) but it was still really good. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Would You Like To Be a Mary Sue? · Sat Mar 13, 2004 10:14 pm

Very very good, had me laughing the whole way through.

Having someone beta it would help with some of the spelling mistakes you missed.

Keep up the great work.

Elanor's Revenge · Wed Mar 03, 2004 11:09 pm

Great Chapter Ladies.... up to your usual standards as well. Keep up the great work Very Happy smiley face

I can't wait to find out who Rumil's 'lady' is!! Do we know her? I can't believe she signed up for the archery compitition... I'm still not sure if thats a good thing or not.... ahhhh, I'm going to mad with trying to figure out whats going to happen next. How long until the years up??? There three or four months into it arn't they (or dare I hope more???). Looking forwards to chappie #18!!

Don't Panic! · Wed Mar 03, 2004 8:38 pm

Awesome story... I was a little weary of it at first, but since everyone thought it was so good I thought I'd give it a go... and boy am I glad I did. Brilliant, bloody brilliant. The computer is in my sister's room so she started giving me wierd looks everytime I burst out laughing, poor penny... whoops.. Pen-ii Wink smiley face

Can't wait to see the next chapter!

Return to Middle Earth · Mon Mar 01, 2004 4:51 pm

Great story, IMHO it's better then Elohir's Tale. Your writting has improved and I'm lovin the plot! Looking forwards to the next chapter.

Trust To Hope · Sun Feb 29, 2004 11:28 am

Wow, Eomer/Lothiriel romances are some of my favorite stories and you've done an awesome job. I _was_ planning on going to bed early last night, until I stumbled across this lovely fic and I just couldn't stop reading. So I had yet another late night Wink smiley face

but man was it worth it.

Your characters are very believeable and loveable. Plotline is extreamly interesting as well, ;D The only thing I noticed (but it's because I've done major research on both Dol Amroth and Rohan) it's it would have been impossable for her to get to Rohan without going through The White City. Unless she went through Dunland. But it doesn't take away from the story at all... I just had to try and convince my mind "Yes, there is a pass... Wink smiley face

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I really liked how you gave her a nickname, it makes it more unique then the other 'E/L' stories.

Keep up the great work, looking forwards to the next chapter!!!!

The Eight Commandments · Wed Feb 25, 2004 2:54 pm

Ahhh, so true, so true. Great points (err commandment) Very Happy smiley face

I never new about the blonde/blond thing... learn something new every day. Thankfully I don't think I've ever written a story with a blonde/blond in it ::gasp::

Just wanted to comment on your POV point. I really hate it when someone outright states who's POV it is. Like when they start a story with

_~_! Legolas' POV !_~_ and have something like that whenever they change POV's. It's not annoying to the point where I won't read the story (as long as it is well written), but I find it takes away from the story. I'll be totally immersed in this world, then ::BANG:: I get snapped out of it.

It's not that hard to weave it into the story. So that by the time you're done reading the first paragragh, you KNOW who's POV it is. You don't need to be told. IMHO it's not a skill that's that hard to learn, and can make a story look a lot more professional. Yes, some printed books use that style. But usually it's one chapter a person, not five POV changes a chapter.

phew... didn't mean to go on and on about it... Keep up the great work.

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