Reviews by Viv

Promise Of The Ages · Mon Mar 07, 2005 2:54 pm

Is this AU because they're hanging out in Eryn Lasgalen instead of Ithilien or the Aglarond? Other than that, it doesn't feel like canon has been distorted, and it certainly doesn't feel as though the distortion is integral to the plot or story. At any rate, this was a melancholy look at the ultimate end of the famed friendship. I was waiting for Galadriel to get a mention, but I can see how that might have detracted from the central relationship, which was always in focus in this story.

The Cursed Queen of Angmar · Tue Mar 01, 2005 4:38 pm

Enjoy this breath, this sense of accomplishment: it's been a lovely ride, and I am happy to have been along to see it. And only after you've soaked in the praises and pride will I ask you ... now what? Wink smiley face

Courage for our Friends · Tue Mar 01, 2005 10:55 am

"Courage is watching Pippin ride away withGandalf to Minas Tirith, and letting go of the last thing he had been holding onto." ... I agree, that was a decisive moment for Merry in the movie. This is what Merry would have thought as courageous. And the other thing: "He does it without realizing that it is an act of courage." I think your interpretation of that is right-on as well. This is also a lovely line: "For Pip, courage is having to grow up." In fact, this piece is packed with them. I really enjoyed the thematic handling, the short little sections, almost poetic in their brevity. If you were interested in making minor improvements, you might consider fixing the formatting (it's a little hard to read, with line breaks showing up almost randomly) and have a beta go over the verb tenses. Other than that, you have a solid piece here.

The First Age of the Sun: Triumph · Sun Feb 20, 2005 3:29 pm

"He is the eldest and she the youngest of the children of Earwen" ... I think it's interesting that Melian would identify folks matrilineally. Indeed, females of her line tend to be more remarked than typical females in Middle-earth. Nice little detail there; I hadn't picked up on it before. Smile smiley face

And, as I've told you before, your characterisations are a joy. Galadriel is prickly, beautiful, and terrifying; Finrod charming, full of energy and wonder; Celeborn the consummate diplomat who also has sufficient courage to be interested in Galadriel. Looking forward to more.

Prayer For An Elven Maiden's Heart · Sun Feb 20, 2005 4:15 am

Poem itself was good, including a really nice re-telling of the movieverse bit: "She's riding in dreadful silence, straight to the sea, her heart is aching, her arms are shaking, she's wondering What if he comes back to me?" Arwen's great Action in LoTR is her faithfulness and loyalty. She never gives up hope (literally and figuratively, since her Man's name is Hope), and you've bridged the book and movie in this poem here, I think, giving her much more strength and interior fortitude than Peter Jackson bothered with. Nice insight. Smile smiley face

(The AN was really long and distracting, and I almost gave up and clicked Back. But I'm really glad I stuck it out. Just a tip: you might lure more readers if you cut down on that lengthy and non-related AN.)

Harmony · Tue Feb 15, 2005 8:37 pm

When I was younger and showed my really bad poems to a poetry professor, she read them and tried to be gentle. She told me that solid imagery was the key to making a poem come alive. You've done that here, not just with the visuals but with all the senses. It feels like home, but gloriously so. Lovely.

Prince of Pride · Mon Feb 14, 2005 5:17 pm

The first line ("I see the way you look into his eyes.") seems to set up a friction, a tension in their relationship. By the end of the poem, I don't feel that tension. Am I missing an important character movement here? The word choices were strong, and that alone makes this a really good poem, I think. Poetry lends itself particularly well to tales of the Valar. Thanks for sharing this one.

Rider of the Mark · Mon Feb 14, 2005 5:11 pm

"I'll ask her next time I have her pinned to the ground" ... He *so* should have said that out loud! lol Gamling's mind is a funny, funny place. I'm a little startled by the characterisation of Legolas ('"Morgoth's Chains!" Legolas had crept up on the other side of Gamling. Aragorn and Gimli were with him. "If I did not abhor the sight of females on the battle field, I would want those two fighting with me."'), but I suspect that it could fit into Mr. Bloom's movie interpretation of the character. "Abéodan, Fyren, Éomer, Wrégan, attend me" ... I love it when Gamling gets all leadershippy. As usual with this story, the narrative is choppy but just on that line between prose and poetry. I like the rhythm of it, would in fact enjoy hearing it performed aloud. It's that kind of piece.

The Elf and Future King · Wed Feb 09, 2005 6:57 pm

Ooooooh to the update. Three lip-smackingly smutty chapters! (Well, only two with actual smut, but still!) How how how do you do that gentle-and-at-the-same-time-rough thing? It's so perfect for Eomer. rowr, horselord.

The Cursed Queen of Angmar · Tue Feb 08, 2005 7:23 pm

December and January were such busy months, I didn't even realize you had updated! But now I've read the new chapter, I want more! How greedy of me. I like how you mentioned Olorin and I wonder how he might show up later. I'm very much looking forward to the final movement of this piece. Great work, as always.

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