Reviews by Viv

The Elf and Future King · Mon Jan 24, 2005 10:00 pm

What? She probably likes the smacking, the pervy little wench. Yeah, I read that kinky table-top stuff. (Bwahaha to other readers! Betas get to peek at all the juicy bits!)

The Elf and Future King · Mon Jan 24, 2005 7:01 pm

The only downside to betaing something is that I've already told you all the parts I thought were yum! Well, I'll say it again: Eomer's not-quite-successful attempts at self-restraint in chapter 1 and Theodred on the bed in chapter 2: scrumptious. Amrun is one lucky wench (plus she's too cute!). Glad you're posting. Smile smiley face

A Tale of the Sixth Age · Sat Jan 22, 2005 4:48 pm

The first line lays out the whole setting in one vastly amusing sentence. Do you know how *hard* that is?! You make it seem so effortless. Great style, great mechanics, gut-chortling lines ... Morder Burgers! Barad-dur Broadcasting Company! *Sprfle!* Write more humour! This is classic stuff. Reminds me (a lot, actually) of Claudio's elf-twins comedies, only with some sort of Grand Epic lurking on the edges of all the funny bits. Wink smiley face

Plus, well, there are those twins again ("and that is old?" ... and leather pants. hee). I'm so hooked.

History Repeats Itself · Sat Jan 22, 2005 4:28 pm

"At that moment, the babies started wailing, and didn't stop for nearly five hundred years." Uh huh. Now, that lifespan-as-long-as-Arda thing looks somewhat less appealing, don't it? lol I thought this piece was very funny. Earendil was a bit of a jerk in the opening scene, but it wasn't too much to take, and his harrowed-dad routine in the second scene redeemed him a bit. The cyclical kick at the end was a pleasant surprise, too. I enjoyed it thoroughly! (This bit of concrit has nothing to do with the story, and you can disregard it if you wish: I think most people define "drabble" as a scene that has only 100 words. This piece is somewhat longer, so perhaps "short fic" would better describe it in the summary. Also, why is it classified as AU? It could easily fit into Lotr or even Silm, I think.)

Brothers At Heart · Sat Jan 22, 2005 4:21 pm

Legolas's voice is very strong in this piece. I liked your decision to write in first-person from his point of view. Your turns of phrase, I thought, were particularly elven and poetic, even in prose. And the characterization of Gimli as gruff but loyal, trudging after his friend even though he himself might have preferred to settle, was endearing. Even beta-less, the grammar errors were few. A beta could only add a little polish; the piece is good already. Smile smiley face

Haldir and Elzabeth : Healing · Fri Jan 21, 2005 7:50 pm

Some of the modernisms put me off: "bras," "pain endorphins," "millimeters," "pants," and use of the word "ok." But Haldir's attention to his lover is compelling. The smut scene went a little too quickly, but it was okay in the end. The feeling was that these are longtime lovers, though I might have wanted to see how the injury affected their typical lovemaking routine. Good job with grammar, spelling, and all that. The story was definitely readable. Smile smiley face

The Bond · Tue Jan 18, 2005 1:02 pm

Still reading (am I slow or what?! Still only on ch. 11), but I wanted to pop in here and say that I loved the concept of Gwedinaeth. This isn't Tolkien, is it? And yet it fits so nicely with his lore of elves that he might have thought of it himself. Very nice.

Part Two - The Taking of Vanelossë · Wed Jan 05, 2005 5:54 pm

Chapter 1 is bright, blindingly sweet, like a fairy tale: you just can't help but grin at the adorable family life of Lego and Vanelosse. Chapter 2, however, descends unexpectedly; I was completely taken off guard and horrified. I think that's a mark of good storytelling. Smile smiley face

I was about to mention the fact that, in Tolkien's world the emergence of hte One Ring and the beginning of the quest to destroy it were super secret -- not even the family back in Mirkwood would have been told everything. Also, I could be very wrong, but I don't think it took the Fellowship 9 months to complete their quest. Weren't they all but done in something like April, after leaving Rivendell at midwinter? (All the info is in the appendixes, but I'm too lazy to look it up right now.) However, as this story is AU, I'll take a chill pill. It might help folks like me who stress about these things if you listed the deviations from bookverse/movieverse in a note at the end or something. Up to you, of course, and no pressure. I'm just persnickity like that. Wink smiley face

At Last · Wed Jan 05, 2005 12:40 am

Oh, and looky! 1001 hits. See?! Folks are reading. Wink smiley face

At Last · Wed Jan 05, 2005 12:40 am

Chapter 5 At Last. Wink smiley face

Have I mentioned before how your Pippin is a thing of beauty? Who'd've thunk a pair of elf-loving wenches would write such a heroic and compelling hobbit? Also, that refrain from the unnamed soldier -- "It is over" -- was such a gorgeous mesh of Tolkien and Philippa Boyens that the scene could have been part of the film. The short rat-tat-tat of scenes in alternating points of view at the end was also brilliant: a steady march to the chapter ending, a rising pace and expectation, even when, as a fan of the prequel, I could guess what was coming. Reunion. And so gut-wrenchingly bittersweet. But I have come to expect it of you. This is, after all, Some *Incredible* Crap. (You finish, and I will nominate.)

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