Reviews by Viv

Berzerkergang. · Wed Dec 03, 2008 11:46 am

This is a study in point-of-view (and therefore so excellent for this challenge). The whole thing rang true, showing hoe myopic battle must be in order for good people to endure it and participate. I've always thought that good soldiers must be able to disconnect; otherwise the horror of what they were doing would drive them crazy. I admire people who can do such things, and I sympathize with them as well, because it has to hurt spiritually. This piece was very in line with your Gamling, and I like him so very much.

A Pirates Life · Mon Nov 17, 2008 4:08 pm

"He had a heading, but no one to share it with. " -- Jack needs a hug. A big, long, wet, naked hug from someone who cares. I'm sure I could scrounge up some volunteers.

Passing · Tue Nov 04, 2008 3:35 pm

The family dynamic here rings so true. And this line: "“My father did not. Yet neither loss seems less painful." Right on, Eomer. People always say that "he died peacefully" as if that makes a bloody bit of difference to those of us left behind. Sure we would prefer our loved ones to endure no suffering, but dead is dead. How in character this was for Theoden. Made me love him all the more. Very subtle work here, Miz Al.

Swift Feet · Tue Nov 04, 2008 3:31 pm

Oh, yay you posted this here! The whole thing is an intricate dance, both between the characters and between the author and reader. I certainly felt swept up. Pacing is incredible, and the identity twist is delicious. Your writing is like truffles. Good thing it doesn't have calories, being this rich.

The Finder · Tue Oct 14, 2008 2:16 pm

Is he really? Then how did he .... oooh. This is a good mystery. Am itchin' to know more!

Red Striped Roses. · Tue Oct 14, 2008 12:37 pm

Nice, nice job with the voice, Neume! I'm sure it was hard to sustain, but you did it. It didn't feel forced o uneven at all. It felt like Gaffer was sitting right beside me and talkin. And then, at the end, to realise who he wa talking *to*... ahhh. I'd sniffle if I were the sniffling sort. Thank you for this. It was lovely.

As The Stars Wheeled By · Mon Oct 13, 2008 5:05 pm

Good heavens, you actually did it. You wrote a mystery! You had ambiance and tension and creaking floorboards and everything! You definitely need to do more of these, because you have a knack for creating just the right atmosphere..I don't know the characters all that well, but now you've got me itchin to read more about them, and their quiet, secret heroics. Thank you so much for writing this; I very much enjoyed reading it.

There and Back Again--A Mystery · Sun Oct 05, 2008 6:11 pm

Wow! Eira, that's brilliant! I didn't have a clue what was going on until the very last line, though now that I read back through i see clues all over the place. Very, very good job with this challenge!

The Night's Advice · Sun Oct 05, 2008 12:15 pm

lol. I have recently learned that a childhood song I long thought was nonsense sounds... actually has words. It's funny how childhood can grant blistering moments of insight and then look over other things entirely. I guess that's part of the charm. But what I liked best about this piece was that it really isn't anything that Saradoc said or did that comforted Merry: it was just his presence. And that in itself is insight, NB. Smile smiley face

You Can't Take the Sky From Me · Sat Oct 04, 2008 10:20 pm

I dig dig dig this arrogance! The voice is excellent. "For it was the stars that should comment first"< -- squee! Really nice work, Vlad, and it's not even smutty! Wink smiley face

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