Reviews by Rous

A Woman of the Town · Tue Jun 28, 2005 3:32 pm

Very nicely done, so far. I really like the way you are progressing. Any chance you will finish it? (That is why I so hate to start WIP, sometimes they never get finished.) I am not big on Les Miserables (never read the book, did not see the musical, probably would not rent the movie), but I know I do like this. Please consider an update.

Falling Stars · Sat Jun 25, 2005 10:10 am

Wow! That was so sweet. A taste of first love, and nicely done. Not much on hobbits, but love is love. Thank you for sharing.

Lord of the Glittering Harem · Fri Jun 24, 2005 9:52 am

What can I add to the rest? Nothing. So, that being said, I agree with everything stated already. I really dislike the common portrayal of Gimli. He comes off as an ass, and stupid at that. So, he can get one up on the pernickety elf. That is my favourite part. Thank you for sharing.

Soul's Journey · Thu Jun 23, 2005 7:03 am

Hmmm, a bit obscure for my superficial knowledge. LOL Okay, I am at a loss.

I did find the first line a bit hard to follow. I am not sure what you are trying to say here. Maybe it is just too early in the day. (My brain needs tea and the clock chiming noon to be fully awake.) Thank you for sharing.

Maybe We Should Stay In Minas Tirith · Thu Jun 23, 2005 6:59 am

Now that was funny! I have found there are advantages to being on the shorter side. Maybe not quite as enjoyable as for these two. This is nice, and a bit of fun to boot. Thank you for sharing.

The wedding custom · Thu Jun 23, 2005 6:56 am

This did seem to be one of the more odious customs. I wonder if it is still in practice, on the QT, among the royals and those of artistocratic blood? Can you imagine?

Anyway, I found only one problem: you need a comma before Lothiriel in the first line. Otherwise, a great read. Thank you for sharing.

Of Fathers and Sons · Wed Jun 22, 2005 10:03 pm

Very nicely done. It shows the contrast suffered in many families. I did have a problem with one line: "The youngest, a failure within his father’s eyes." I really think that 'within' should have been just 'in'. It just reads odd to me. Otherwise, very good. I liked it alot.

Brothers · Fri Jun 17, 2005 6:22 am

Very nice! I am not much on the earlier elves, but this makes me want to delve a little deeper into the past. There is only one thing I found: "but than again it was so hard not to like Arafinwë. " 'than' should be 'then'. Otherwise, this was a great read and a nice diversion. Thank you for sharing.

Valor · Thu Jun 16, 2005 6:26 am

Wow! Um, that about sums it up. This was very powerful. I, too, thought of Eowyn at first, but it exemplifies the driving force behind all those fighting on the side of right. Very well written. It is lyrical in its poetry. I agree with KhazarKhum that it is close to poetic form, but I feel it makes a more powerful statement as prose. Thank you for sharing.

How I Spent My Summer Vacation · Wed Jun 15, 2005 6:40 am

Well, that was a waste of time. A funny, delightful, interesting waste of time. But, I feel the need to point out, you missed a few characters. I think another journal should be started. Maybe, since Christmas break is just around the corner. (Hey, if you can make things up, so can I.) After all, those other characters may get jealous, and we cannot have discord in ME, now can we? Thank you for sharing.

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