Reviews by Rous

Crossroads of Time · Fri Sep 03, 2004 2:32 pm

inglor said
> Rous said
> > Intriguing story. I, too, am interested in more. The writing is above average and the imagery is good. The premise is interesting. I hope you update soon. And remember the number one rule: NO SHORT CHAPTERS. There, now that that is out, hurry up and update.
> > Thank you.
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> Ditto
> You wrote enough to tease...
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> One thing though: This is a nit pick but it lends to a credible story, I don't think even elves would hunt in shiny armour, too much noise and too much sparkly stuff to scare off prey.
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> Inglor

Tesseleve
While I would like to take the credit for the quote, it was inglor. I am ashamed to say that I did not catch the shiny armour thingy. So sorry. Confused smiley face

And I agree with the ellie, why not kill (sorry for the pun) two birds (or a hart or two) with one stone? Waiting for new chapters. My popcorn is getting cold.

Butterfly-Cocoon · Thu Sep 02, 2004 10:31 pm

Tesseleve said
> Hi Rous,
> wow this is a little more detailed than the orginal,kinda like it, what happen now Exclamation smiley face

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> isn't funny how we can take lifes stories and use them in our own? it it works well.sometime we can even learn a lesson from them.
> ok you got me hooked AGIN Exclamation smiley face

whens the next chapter??Please update Soon smiley face

Do not tell me you found the original? Where? I knew I should have burned it. LOL. Unlike some, I am not inordinately proud of my first attempt. It is crude, unpolished and shows an appalling ignornance of the facts and lore of LOTR. I hope my work shows improvement and maturity. I have worked very hard on improving my writing, but then, that is the purpose to writing. Thank you.

The Pied Piper of Lórien · Wed Sep 01, 2004 11:27 pm

I love it. I follow the main story, and I liked Ailment. A few more fillers would not make me unhappy. Thank you, very much.

Thranduil's Bargains · Wed Sep 01, 2004 3:31 pm

Great! That is all I can say. Took it with me on vacation, but only got to read it today. Wish I had read it earlier. I like the development. Not too fast, not too slow. I am still waiting to hear Legolas' opinion of Glinn and his father. Not that I expect him to object, but he must have SOMETHING to say. I will wait not too patiently for the next update. I will just fill my time with something to drink. Drunk smiley face

I'll not Marry · Wed Sep 01, 2004 10:01 am

I did go and read a few of your other pieces.

A Hole Possessed · Wed Sep 01, 2004 6:01 am

Oh, what a tangled web we weave
When first we practice to believe
That our love, though tender hearted
Can so easily be thwarted
For e'en though we get our heart's desire
Too often it's consumed by fire
The one that burns and blinds our sights
To other of the world's delights

What scheming she does, and all for naught! Bilbo returns and snatches away her only love. How heart rending! This was amusing to say the least. Thank you.

Goldberry's Song · Wed Sep 01, 2004 5:47 am

I loved it. To me, it is better than most of the fiction written in this realm. Some of the meter was a little off, but, then, that is the complaint I get about my poetry, so it is not a criticism. The imagery was outstanding. The rhymes worked very well, even the lines that did not follow the pattern. In all honesty, I like this better than the other two pieces you have posted here. Not that they are not good, just too dark for even me (and some of my stuff at another site is bottom of the emotional barrel). I think you should tackle another poem, maybe on a totally different character. I would like to see what you do for them. LOL Thank you VERY MUCH for this one.

Drunk smiley face

Crossroads of Time · Tue Aug 31, 2004 4:39 pm

Intriguing story. I, too, am interested in more. The writing is above average and the imagery is good. The premise is interesting. I hope you update soon. And remember the number one rule: NO SHORT CHAPTERS. There, now that that is out, hurry up and update.
Thank you.

I'll not Marry · Tue Aug 31, 2004 5:47 am

I like the characterizations, but I have some problems with some of the phrasing. Too modern. While I understand that they would have idioms, much as we do, I really cannot see someone from ME saying, 'duh'. I did appreciate the struggles portrayed. I could feel the pain. That was very well done. Perhaps I should go and read the other parts. This did intrigue me.

Comrades · Sun Aug 29, 2004 4:13 pm

I enjoyed this, also, but agree with Nancy, it left a little to be desired in the second (also agree this could have been just one) chapter. However, I did also like the bits between Elrond and Theoden, and Elrond's reaction to Legolas' and Gimli's friendship. I dislike intensely the assumption that Elrond was all knowing and all seeing. I like to see him shaken, and even stirred, occasionally. Otherwise, well done. Thank you.

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