Reviews by NancyBrooke

Mind Games · Tue Dec 14, 2004 4:47 pm

Again, as with "Distant Maiden" you've really found an interesting gap moment in the narrative to explore. Your evil Sauron certainly finds Arwen's achilles heel, as did you - very convincing.

I missed some of the lyricism of "Distant Maiden" however and, one small note, your use of the modern word "morph" jarred me. Maybe a little tightening up? could make this a really terrific work.

Distant Maiden · Tue Dec 14, 2004 4:39 pm

Your very evocative story gave me a little respite of peace in an otherwise busy afternoon. You really communicated the atmosphere and feelings well.

So few... · Thu Dec 09, 2004 3:42 pm

Very good. The best thing about a drabble is that the form can help get you to the heart of things. You certainly did that here. I particularly liked the line "against my better judgement." But who is the brother Eowyn had lost? she had only Eomer, I'm pretty sure, and nothing happens to him; confused Confused smiley face

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Snow · Mon Dec 06, 2004 4:56 pm

An excellent story, full of fine details that catch the eye but never become overwhelming. I thought the characterizations were spot-on, and drawn with great understanding. I liked Denethor's good spirits and Boromir's comforting compassion most of all. Wonderful to meet Faramir at such a turning point in his life.

The Twelve Days of Waiting · Fri Dec 03, 2004 9:35 am

Most amusing. Now that I have opened this story I realize I'm going to have to wait each day and damn you for your ironic humor!! Laughing smiley face

A Short Rest · Wed Nov 24, 2004 4:37 pm

Excellent, Jay, a charming story. I thought you did really catch Gandalf and Bilbo and represented them very characteristically. I particularly liked how well you wove Estel into the story we are familiar with from another perpsective. I was also glad to see a relatively serious rendition of Elrohir and Elladan - particularly funny how they call each other "El." My only twitch was I thought the Dwarf women joke a little overplayed, and Thorin, not Gandalf, had the map, I believe.

Shame this couldn't be entered in the "If they'd had a chat," challenge; it would have been perfect! and exactly the kind of idea inspired me originally.

From that Moment · Thu Nov 18, 2004 5:04 pm

Good idea! That is certainly a defining aspect of Legolas's character - the archer.

I think you might loosen up the language a bit, though, and fix that dialog formatting. It would make your story just that much easier to read.

Congrats on filing your first!!

Crossroads · Sat Nov 13, 2004 11:03 am

A very promising beginning! I think you made Denethor's choice very convincing. I particularly liked his suddenly appearing just old and tired, and Gandalf saying he had been meddling for a long time. I couldn't remember if those moments had their antecedants in book or movie but I certainly saw them anew in your story. Will look forward to more.

Entulesse · Wed Nov 10, 2004 3:38 pm

I have only the shallowest knowledge of the events chronicled in the Silmarilion and enjoyed this very much as it is not about them, but the relationship between Finrod and Amarie which is evoked clearly and imaginatively.

(few typos you might want to look to, Inglor, to make it perfect)

A Pretty Toy · Fri Oct 29, 2004 5:50 pm

Very interesting! I've put this on my watch list because I'm really curious to see where this goes and how Tom and Goldberry find their place in it.

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