Reviews by Sulriel

Unscarred · Mon Nov 21, 2005 12:12 pm

Very nice Nancy, thoughtful. I like being able to see so much depth in the few words of a drabble. This one's quite powerful.

By the Sea · Mon Nov 21, 2005 8:32 am

...don't know what I can say that hasn't already been said 100 times, but I wanted to let you know you've picked up a new reader and I'm reading through to catch up as quick as I can. Smile smiley face

Paperwork · Sun Nov 20, 2005 9:22 am

This is a fun drabble. I like you you worked in the backstory and implications of Glorfindel's temple and Erestor's longstanding and persistant teasing in trying to keep him in his office. Wink smiley face

Leaving... · Sat Nov 19, 2005 8:55 pm

Nicely done, especially for a first effort. Smile smiley face

The Earth Still Remembers... · Sat Nov 19, 2005 8:30 am

This is reminiscent of folk songs such as 'where have all the flowers gone'. I enjoy the haunting melancholy tone and the bittersweet thoughts of wondrous ages past.

The Rape Of Arda · Sat Nov 19, 2005 8:20 am

How delightfully emotional and painful. I enjoy looking at things from the 'other' point of view and this is especially well-done. I can't remember reading anything from this perspective before and it was a lovely surprise to see this at the top of the list this morning.

A Stolen Love · Thu Nov 17, 2005 9:06 am

You certainly have an interesting premise, but I find your casual writing style a bit hard to follow. I normally wouldn't comment in this way except in a beta forum, but you requested reviews including critique in your heading, so I hope that you find this useful.

Your characterizations are intriguing, but seem inconsistent, but that may be (in part) because I'm having trouble following your transitions between POV characters and authorial intrusions. - also because I have (in my own mind) fairly firmly entrenched characterizations of canon characters that are sometimes difficult for other authors to connect with.

I am a huge fan of original characters and strong female characters, but I'm also a self-confessed uber-geek concerning canon, and while I can't critique the premise of your story (it is your story after all, and a valid and interesting plotline), I have to admit that I find it too far removed from canon to hold my interest through the chapters. Tolkien does give us the warrior Elf-women and the Shieldmaidens of Rohan and he doesn't (I don't think) exclude the possibility of female rangers, so there are plenty of possibilities but you haven't anchored the reader in any of these possibilities. I do GREATLY appreciate the fast pace of your story and the pro-active moving-forward of the plot with the action in each chapter, and I'm not suggesting you bog the earlier chapters with backstory, but oftentimes casual comments, names and other worked-in references can give the reader the grounding they need for this sort of thing.

I do think you have a lot of good work going on here and hope to see you continue. I hope you find my comments helpful in thought-provoking ways as that is the spirit in which they are provided.

Not a Boy · Tue Nov 15, 2005 8:31 am

Cute! I think all boys want a brother to play with. Smile smiley face

The Dwarvish Flute · Wed Nov 09, 2005 8:45 pm

I can't belive this hasn't been reviewed yet - it's wonderful!

I really enjoy your writing; the delicate overall balance of description and imagery is wonderful. ... LOL ... you'll make a hobbit fancier of me yet

The Ghost Of Utterance Past (Drabble) · Tue Nov 08, 2005 7:35 pm

I enjoyed this a lot, the innocuous beginning and middle and then the hard slap at the end takes your breath away. Well done.

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