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The Cursed Queen of Angmar (R)
by KhazarKhum.
Chapters [51]
Reviews [ 154] Warnings [BDSM, violence, rape, torture]
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Tue Aug 31, 2004 8:54 pm
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| Lordy, WK the matchmaker?! I can't wait to see it. And how elegantly you worked in a WK/Herumor convo without shifting from Ariashal's POV. Very clever. The long delay was worth it; thank you so much for updating! |
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Penance (PG-13)
by Magdaleina.
Chapters [3]
Reviews [ 6] Warnings [No bad things yet but suggestions may follow]
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Mon Aug 30, 2004 11:49 pm
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| Now that's a fresh point of view! Your Curunir voice is fantabulous; same with Sam. The little bits shine: Same being worried about the naked stranger messing up his garden; the care with which you selected the name. This story is thoroughly enjoyable so far. Please do update! |
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Whisper in the Wind (G)
by ADionne.
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Tue Aug 24, 2004 4:24 pm
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I am looking forward to the polished and perfect version; this one is a lovely preview.  It's almost like you see a painting and then relate it to the reader in a blow-by-blow, color-by-layer account. It's immersive and gorgeous writing. So hurry up with the beta already!  |
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Terrible Two (PG-13)
by Gloredhel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 4] Warnings [Cursing, and child nudity]
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Tue Aug 24, 2004 4:18 pm
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| I love the idea of little Estel causing havoc in the placid routines of the Rivendell elves. However, like Vendie I have some concerns about the langauge choices: "little shit" just doesn't seem very elf-like to me. Also, you may want to pass this piece by a beta, or at least a spellchecker (the spelling of "thru" instead of "through" really threw me... hee, I just couldn't resist). |
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The Next Day (G)
by Saoirse.
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Tue Aug 24, 2004 4:07 pm
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| Definitely some powerful images in this piece, and such nice word selection: "her brown eyes spilling tears to leave clean tracks down her dirty face." You may want to have a grammar/punctuation person give it a quick proofread; the errors were minor, but they were frequent enough for me to notice them (starting with the AN: "whilst I was reading inspired me to right this"). Still, despite those little grammar hiccups, this was a lovely piece. Thank you for letting me read! |
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The Journey Home (R)
by Ilmatar.
Chapters [18]
Reviews [ 16] Warnings [Legomance]
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Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:44 pm
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| Your main character, Elaviel, is delightful. She comes across as kind of nerdy and nervous, but in the cutest possible way. As a nerdy and nervous girl myself, I identified with her easily. The things this story lacks so far are the kinds of things that I usually describe as polish. For instance, "less breaks" should be "fewer breaks" and "It was her who would have needed the comforting words" should start "It was she" ... That sort of thing. A quick beta wouldn't even fix these things; you'd need a more intense beta. Besides, nothing in this fic diminishes its entertainment value. I read the first chapter and enjoyed it a lot; the subject matter is dramatic and intense, and you're handling it well so far. That "polish" junk is just the insignificant something that keeps the writing from being superb. |
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I don't wanna miss a thing. (G)
by Gloredhel.
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Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:34 pm
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| If you skip the lyrics (which I always do in songfics; those quotes belong to someone other than the author of the piece I'm reading), there isn't much here. The idea is very compelling, but I'd really like it if you could set the scene, tell the vignette, without all the lyrics in the way. I'm a sucker for Arwen/Aragorn bits, and this one certainly has some deep feeling going on, it just isn't fleshed out enough. |
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Ceaseless Silence (PG)
by saborice.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [ 8] Warnings [Character death]
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Thu Aug 19, 2004 12:13 pm
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| That intro sequence was fabulous. But when you started recounting the movie, verbatim, I lost interest. The screenplay isn't nearly as elegant as that first original scene you wrote. I would be interested in seeing your reinterpretation of the whole thing, with original dialogue and description and with Legolas's thread of hopelessness weaving into the whole piece, rather than just at the beginning and in the last few lines. |
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Life in Fandom (PG)
by allamericanreject.
Chapters [4]
Reviews [ 12]
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Wed Aug 18, 2004 8:02 pm
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| The writing style is very engaging and flows nicely. Go you! At times, it felt sort of hectic, like you were dropping in names instead of developing characters. And that's a valid style, of course, it just feels kind of odd. I liked the elvnising of the food ... very amusing parody of Tolkien characters. Maybe some more of that sort of thing, and less OOCness, like drunk!Aragorn? |
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The Lord of the House of the Golden Flower (G)
by Jillian.
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Wed Aug 18, 2004 7:51 pm
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| This is charming! Of course, I'm a sucker for Glorfindel stories, but I also really enjoyed Favulea. She seemed worthy of the golden-flowered one. |
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