Reviews by Viv

Strange Revels · Fri Jun 04, 2004 1:21 pm

Oh, write their next meeting! Please! This story was scrumptious, and so believeable. I love how you write Merry. Only one thing bothered me throughout... did he ever get a chance to pee? If not, he's doubly impressive for completing an entire seduction whilst having a full bladder. Wink smiley face

ADionne · Tue Jun 01, 2004 8:41 pm

"This day was not going to be like yesterday."

Thank you for writing a decent opening line. If you hear applause in the background, that's just me. Wink smiley face

This was a fine opening chapter, and I look forward to reading updates. Lothiriel seems a pleasant person, somebody I wouldn't mind getting to know. Just one thing: What happened yesterday that makes this much-different one so much better? Or worse? After that opening line, I was expecting to get that information -- if nothing else -- from this chpater. Instead, the chapter contained a lot of nice things, a fairly dull day, and several interesting characters. But nothing spectacular. If you were looking for a jumping off place for chapter 2, that might be a good one. Wink smiley face

To Remember · Tue Jun 01, 2004 7:38 pm

I sense that something powerful is going on in this story, but I can't quite reach it. Maybe the language problems are keeping it hidden. Have you considered proofreading, or maybe having someone else proofread the story? Setting and tense were especially confusing. Some of the word choices were just lovely, but it's hard to get the full impact of this story in its present form. I hope you'll consider revising it.

Healing in Valinor · Sat May 29, 2004 1:32 pm

What a gorgeous image of Galadriel and Finrod reunited. I could feel the joy of that celebration, and understood Frodo's humility in the face of such glory. Your characterization of Finrod was lovely; how comforting to know that he felt his sister's moment of temptation and triumph, even across the sundering sea. Great piece.

At Last · Sat May 29, 2004 1:16 pm

It's the little details that make your writing so sleek and immersive. For instance, Isobel doens't just magically find a place to stay; her hostess has "given her the use of a small bedroom that had belonged to her eldest daughter, now married." Nice.

The scene on the roof was exquisite. Such a scene, with just internal monologue, should be boring as hell. But yours was not. How do you *do* that??

Pippin remains very true to voice. I loved his subtle teasing when they first met and he was catching her up on events, and her very believable reaction (laughter). Also his patient caretaking, checking in on her. Lovely characterization.

The Pelargir battle knocked my socks off.

And that ch. 3 ending is *not fair*. You must update immediately. I mean it. Smile smiley face

Return to Middle Earth · Tue May 18, 2004 4:03 pm

Oh my god, chiquita. Amazing, and even more so than usual.

If Sinead were the only key, he would have to send her to Mandos; may the Valar forgive him for this one last kinslaying. Yow, it hurts even to read that line. What a hero. *girly sigh*

Glorfindel wondered if the stinker would be so keen if he knew that this elf could take him out in less than ten heartbeats, bound wrists or not. Hell yeah. *girly sigh compounded*

One question (and I'm sure it's there, but I just overlooked it), when does he get his hands unbound? He mentioned bound wrists in that delish line above, but when he and Sinead are tied to the tree, he's stroking her hair to comfort her. When the captors tied them to the tree did they also unbind Glorfy's wrists? Seems like a tactical mistake to me, but I'm all for stupid minions. Wink smiley face

(Also fix spelling of "Celebriam" which should be "Celebrian" and "Alvari’s" which should be "Avari's")

But that whole last scene, on the beach of Alqualonde. Just, wow.

Bedside Chatter · Mon May 17, 2004 4:36 pm

What a compelling little gap-filler! Leave it to Pip to inquire about ale, even in dire situations. Wink smiley face

But you didn't make him a buffoon: you made him young and battle-scarred and heroic. And how nice for Eomer to recognize all these things.

Out Of Stone · Sun May 16, 2004 9:42 pm

Thank you so much for writing this. The fandom has needed it for so long: a story about what Tolkien meant by making Gimli and Legolas friends. A story about acceptance and coexistence and the merging of different concepts of beauty, ultimately creating something new and far more lovely. I found the whole piece moving, and your characterization of all three main characters full and brilliant. Thank you again.

The World that Was · Sun May 16, 2004 9:32 pm

Moralanqua said
> That was goood! Nicely done!
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> Hang on! Holy shnit!
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> Terri AND Viv? As in Viv the Llama? Surprised smiley face

Yep, the same. And that would also be the same Terriviv combo of "The Best Part" series, for those fine folks who read far too much smut.

Candlelit Conversation · Wed May 12, 2004 6:48 pm

The first time I read this, I was impressed with Pippin's youth and Eowyn in general (I already told you this). But this time, that last line from Pippin just wolloped me. Was that why he was waiting there for her to wake? To thank her? How beautiful.

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