Reviews by Viv

The Maegd Feorran · Thu Jul 10, 2008 10:41 am

I love this, NB. Your point-of-view character is very accessible. In one breath she's talking about strategic alliances and in the next about getting a pony (well, a horse). It sounds so young-girly, but not in a flighty way: this is a princess who has a sense of her station, even if she might wish her fate otherwise. I want to hug her.

Her mother feels *very* queenly. Almost in a scary way, but mostly just impressive.

Taming the Wildflower · Tue Jul 08, 2008 2:45 pm

"Never lick the courier" ... Words to live by, indeed! This whole piece was a voluptuous, naughty, breathless read. You use such rich language. I held off reading the earlier version on GoI because I suspected that I'd want to indulge virgin eyes on the final product. I was right. This was delicious. Almost I want it to continue, but then I realize that this is the perfect ending. It doesn't distort canon but lends a subtext to suesequent interactions. I can wholly believe that something like this happened. But I *do* have a niggle of curiosity... whatever happened to Rhavloth?

A Little Closer to the Edge, My Love … · Sun Jul 06, 2008 11:13 pm

Sulriel saidI think there is good fodder going forward and also going back. Miriel and Finwe *before* the great journey.... *sends bunny gallumping at viv!* I don't think Feanor was an accident, I think she must have known what she was doing. Why would she do that?

Oh, you are cruel! I'd write it, but I don't have the right skillz. You ever sick that bunny on a Silmficcer, though, let me know so I can read it!

The Fire Within · Sun Jul 06, 2008 11:02 pm

I love these two as young elves: Feanor so confident and insightful, and downright silly sometimes; Nerdanel as serious, thoughtful, focused. It's almost like reading a tragedy, knowing the end to which they eventually come and yet being unable to look away from the road that takes them there. I don't *want* her to become ever-grieving widow Nerdanel who bore seven sons only to have them all die tragically; and I don't *want* this Feanor to come to a vengeful end in search of his silly bling. I want them to be happy ever after, dagnabbit.

It's your fault, you know, for making them so accessible and warm. Plus the smutty goodness at the end of this installment:we likes it, precious. And we could stand to see more (both the story and the, er, intimacies).

Heart's Cord · Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:32 pm

This is so excellent. Your figurative language totally drew me into the setting and the character: "That fear settled in the pit of my gut like old milk." I didn't want the story to end, even though it ended in the perfect way. This is an exquisite piece of writing.

My Blood, Your Blood · Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:25 pm

Wow! What an excellent exercise in point of view. Your sensory details were amazing, reminding me with every sentence that the wolf was a physical beast first. I also loved this line: "Bloodied foam covered the battlefield." Exquisite action scenes.

Êl-galad Êl-celair · Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:17 pm

This worked out really well! You explained the basis from which Tar-Meneldil grew, and it makes total sense. Plus, the scene reads very easy on the eyes. It's swift, visual, and quick with dialogue instead of overexplanation. I love reading this kind of writing! Thank you so much for the entertainment. Smile smiley face

Engaged in Sport · Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:12 pm

I liked the fight scene! And that intro part from Ugluk's point of view was tasty! Good work!

Above It All · Thu Jul 03, 2008 4:08 pm

LOL. The last two words are a total kicker!

Paradise Lost · Thu Jul 03, 2008 4:06 pm

But it's such good angst! I loved that whole paragraph about what is a wife taken by force. Her bitterness comes through so clearly! Really excellent work, elea!

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