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Her Look at Frodo (G)
by xBabySx3.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [8]
Thu May 06, 2004 8:52 pm
cute, but some errors that can easily be corrected.

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
A Song For The Forlorn (G)
by LuthienTinuviel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [3]
Warnings [Irony]
Thu May 06, 2004 8:50 pm
How is this fan fiction? Where's the Middle Earth reference?

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Ever so fair (G)
by Monaleoht.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [5]
Warnings [none]
Thu May 06, 2004 8:49 pm
"Sailing above the land" was my favourite line. Nice poem indeed, but I don't see how it's fan fiction.

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
The Coming of Elessar (G)
by Cadiliniel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [2]
Thu May 06, 2004 8:41 pm
I like the final couplet very much. However, the 'cloud' line took a second to understand. It might be more powerful if you changed the line so it ends with 'bowed,' which you use later on anyway. I just think it's easier to work that word in, and it can have a greater impact than a cloud analogy. But, it's your choice.

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
The Pyre (G)
by Cadiliniel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [5]
Warnings [Slight 'death by fire' stuff.]
Thu May 06, 2004 8:37 pm
Nice use of vocabulary and imagery! I can see you know what you're doing Big Wink smiley face

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Amo et Odi, Excrucior (G)
by Julie327.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [5]
Sat Mar 20, 2004 9:40 pm
I liked how it sort of grew, the shape of the words themselves. I love the fire and ice imagery. I recommend embellishing the fire-ice/love-hate thing, and ditch blunt lines like 'I hate you! I love you so,' because, toward the end, you repeated yourself a bit.If you do that, this will be fantastic! That's just my opinion.

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Precious Gollum (G)
by HollyTook.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [3]
Sat Mar 20, 2004 9:32 pm
What do you mean? 'sacrifice sense for sound'?

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Ascension (G)
by fileg.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [3]
Thu Mar 18, 2004 11:46 am
This was a terrific piece of work! You are a very talented poet, and you know your stuff. Very very nice. I've never heard a poem by the name which you call it, but I have heard it called a Vilanelle. Is there a difference?

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Despised and Hated (PG-13)
by setogirl421.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [10]
Warnings [Hint of necromania]
Wed Mar 17, 2004 10:42 pm
A well crafted poem! Very good, and most importantly, original! Smile smiley face


~*Holly Took*~
 
 
Wonderings (G)
by LuthienTinuviel.
Chapters [1]
Reviews [2]
Wed Mar 17, 2004 1:16 pm
You have a great idea and were on the verge of getting your imagery, but this needs some serious grammatical work. I'm probably sounding like a broken record right now, and don't think I don't give poetic license, but this requires translation! Watch out for your apostrophes [in poetry, puncuation is not always a mandate, but apostrophes change the meaning of words, so they are needed if you want to make sense], your prepositions, and your verb agreements.

~*Holly Took*~
 
 
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